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| A Charge To Keep by French Pony | 9 Review(s) |
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| TithenFeredir | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 4/26/2005 |
| Well, phooey. Sorry about the blank post! My pinky keeps hitting Enter instead of Shift. I love your Thranduil. He seems very wise and confident, as one might expect from an elf of his age and stature. The warm relationship between him and Legolas a pleasure to read. I found it particularly touching that Thranduil stopped and savored that moment of closeness with his son, not knowing that Legolas would not return until after the war that is to come. Good Story! ~TF | |
| Dot | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 4/24/2005 |
| *blushes* I just realised that I never left a review for this. So sorry! That’ll teach me to decide to come back to things later… And it was such a good chapter too. Legolas’ stubborn streak seems to be getting him through this. I can’t imagine holding a heavy bow at full draw with an aching shoulder and head. I’d have given up after five seconds, not to mind five minutes. I must say, I like the way you’re writing his recovery. He’s doing well but it’s the tiredness and difficulty concentrating that still troubles him. Very realistic. Also very frustrating for him, I’d imagine. It sounds like Thranduil is a good person to have around, though! I just love the image of the two of them out in the sunshine together, Thranduil working away and Legolas dozing next to him. There’s a lovely closeness between them, especially in the way that Thranduil reaches out to touch his son. And I was so touched by the lines “Do not be ashamed, Legolas. You are still healing, and that takes time. I do not think you appreciate just how badly you were hurt. You may sleep as much as you want, provided that you wake each time.” You do a great job showing the encroaching Shadow and worsening times for the Woodland Realm. The growing evil and its effects on the warriors are certainly good reason to call off the search for Gollum and I guess it was only a matter of time before Thranduil reached that decision. I liked the discussion about how to get a message to Mithrandir. He could indeed be just about anywhere and leaving a message in Imladris certainly makes the most sense. I was glad Thranduil put an end to them all blaming themselves, but I can definitely understand why Legolas feels he should go as the last surviving member of the patrol responsible for Gollum that night and when he was unable to help in the search. The moment between father and son was so beautiful. Legolas need the reassurance of his father, I think, and Thranduil seems so sorry to see him go. I love that even as an adult, Thranduil still calls him “mouse”. Poor Thranduil. He has no idea that “as soon as you are able” will be a much longer time that he thinks. Great chapter, FP! Apologies again for the delay in reviewing. :-) | |
| The Karenator | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 4/20/2005 |
| I had sympathy pains with Legolas while he held his bow at full draw. I like how you handled Legolas's recovery. And the guilt he felt for being the only survivor. But then, there seemed to be enough guilt to go around. You also did a nice job of getting across to the reader the dire circumstances of Mirkwood with the shadow moving closer to where the elves lived. The last conversation between Legolas and Thranduil was nice. There was much left unsaid, but the reader could 'hear' the underlying unspoken love and sadness between the king and his departing son. Nicely done. Karen | |
| Karri | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 4/19/2005 |
| Terrific chapter, FP! I liked the pace of Legolas's recovery. Too often character heal much to quickly in fanfic to be plausible, and I find that irksome. Thranduil was very good with him, as well, but then I always adore you Thranduil and Legolas relationship. One of my favorite lines of his was when he told Legolas he could sleep as much as he liked so long as he always awoke. :-) You have done a good job of creating a believable sense of purpose in sending Legolas to Rivendell, too. Another of my favorite Thranduil line is when his bids Legolas return home when he is able. :-) | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 4/19/2005 |
| Poor Legolas still blames himself - he is bound to, I suppose, as he was not only one of the warriors who 'let' Gollum escape, but also the only survivor. Thranduil is wonderful here - supportive and understanding, and saying all the right things. The scene where he holds Legolas is great - but that hug will have to last him a lot longer than he imagines :( Jay | |
| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 4/19/2005 |
| "If I think about my shoulder. . . I do not mind the headache so much." Good line and too true. Poor Legolas. We all know how miserable it is to get back into shape after an injury or illness and we are not usually talking about such severe injuries or such peak shape either. It is so nice to see GoodAda!Thranduil. I just love him and you do a great job with him. The mouse nickname is very sweet. :) What I really like--and certainly expected from you--was Legolas voluntering to go to Imladris and Thranduil allowing him to go because it would help him heal (i.e. not as a punishment as has been portrayed many times). And little details like the apples make this so nicely done. Good job and I am very glad to see that appears to be not nearly over. I'd like to see Legolas in Imladris agreeing to go on the Quest. And dare we hope to see Thranduil's reaction to that news? I will hope and we'll see what we get. :) | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 4/19/2005 |
| "I am beginning to regret that I ever mentioned blame today," Yes, they seem to be contending for the "most guilty elf of the month" award. It must have been such a shock, with the stronghold attacked and the orcs right by their doors... Guilt is such a tricky feeling. And who would have said Thranduil would take it so mildly? I half expected seeing him spitting fire as a dragon, demanding a satisfactory explanation from Mithrandir! | |
| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 4/18/2005 |
| I've done a small amount of martial arts training, and I know how exhausting it can be to hold a strenuous pose for even thirty seconds, let alone five minutes! If we say that Legolas' longbow is at least, what, a 50 lb draw (more like 100 lb from the way he shot that Nazgul in FOTR) . . . oh my, I hurt just thinking about it. And then he hit the target! No question, even weakened and hurting, Legolas rocks. Maybe I should change that to ESPECIALLY when weakened and hurting. (grin) Loved Thranduil's comforting of him in this chapter. That was beautiful. And the description of the effects that Dol Guldor had on the patrol that approached it was perfect -- you captured the horror of that place very well. I do think that the patrol leader would know what it was, though. Goodness knows Thranduil must have been arranging patrols to guard against and avoid that region to the south for a long time. I notice that this chapter does not say "the end" -- so we will get to see a bit of Legolas' experience in Imladris? Oh goody, I am looking forward to that. The bit about the apples shows just how well you can describe our Mirkwood Prince's wonder in even the simplest things, and I eagerly await his reaction to Imladris. And of course I can hardly wait to see more of him and Aragorn together. | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 4/18/2005 |
| Legolas is really struggling with survivor guilt here and I can see why. He didn't do anything wrong, unless you count not dying when everyone else did. Thranduil's people certainly seem to be struggling against the darkness in this tale. | |