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A Journey Of Discovery  by Jay of Lasgalen 5 Review(s)
DotReviewed Chapter: 6 on 8/21/2005
I think I smiled the whole way through this chapter!

Great job showing the passing of time. I was wondering whether or not we’d get to see Mithlond. “There could be a big settlement here one day - a whole country!” Methinks Ilmarin could be on to something there…

There’s something quite startling about elves finding fossils! I just knew that knife was going to break. Silly elf. I love the fact that Ilmarin and Elrond’s reactions were exactly the same! And I’m blaming you if I start using “Balrog’s balls” in everyday conversation ;-)

I’m endlessly fascinated by the topic of healing. I actually particularly like the way Elrond’s eyes lose focus and he seems to become part of Elrohir, exploring the wound from inside his son. I also really like the way he can sense Elrohir immediately when he tries to see what’s happening. Of course, it’s a marvellous way of exploring the question of healers healing themselves. I’m learning just as much as the twins here! Elrond’s explanation makes perfect sense.

Dan certainly takes after his father! I love the easy manner they have with the elves. I get the impression that they’re like that with anyone, no matter where they’re from, as long as they’re decent people. What a great way to be.

“If the twins would prefer to be with Lord Elrond,” he began, “we do not mind if you share our room, my lady – do we, Ilmarin?” That made me choke on my tea!! You’re so good at writing humour and this chapter is just full of it. It’s great too to see the relaxed relationship they all have with each other now. And poor Ilmarin was propositioned! His reaction is just hysterical. The elves may tease one another about such things but to actually do it is just scandalous! I know I should feel sad that this is Will’s mother but I’m afraid I’m too busy laughing…

And it’s Will! On to the next chapter… :-)


Author Reply: I had to keep reminding myself that there weren't any Hobbits in Bree at this time - it was long before they arrived and colonised the Shire.

The accident with the knife had the dual purpose of allowing Elrond and Elrohir to discuss healing again - I'd wondered myself about healers healing themselves, and wanted to see what Elrond would say about it. Also, it gave the twins a reason to go to the forge and meet Will again. I'm so glad you like 'Balrog's balls' - I'd love to hear someone say it!!

I think Barliman Butterbur is the great-x-100 grandson of Brindley and Dan - you'll notice the family similarities! The Butterburs haven't changed, and neither, sadly, has Will's mother - but she just *had* to meet one of the elves this time. Poor, innocent Ilmarin :) Joking with Celebrían is one thing, but this??

elliskaReviewed Chapter: 6 on 7/30/2005
Poor kids--I think Elrohir is madder that he broke his gift than he is that he had the opportunity to experience more healing lessons (and everything Elrond does from now on is a lesson whether he likes it or not, poor elf). You did a good job showing the other aspects of healing--making medicines and dealing with people. I hope his knife can be fixed. You also did a funny job with the silent 'I told you so's.' :-)

But I laughed out loud at this: Eilenach exchanged a quick glance with his companion, and grinned. “If the twins would prefer to be with Lord Elrond,” he began, “we do not mind if you share our room, my lady – do we, Ilmarin?”

and I about died laughing at this: “I – I think I have just been propositioned,” Ilmarin murmured.

It was bound to happen eventually in Bree. Too funny. Poor guard, but better him than Elrond--the twins would have been really scandalized then! :-)

Hmmm and I am worried about the end part. Don't be too long updating this.



Author Reply: I know exactly where the next (and probably final) chapter is going -it's already written in my head. Getting it onto my laptop and posted though, is more difficult. Nasty things like 'work' and 'life' keep getting in the way!

I'm really glad that you picked out those particular sections. The elves can make slightly riské jokes between themselves (even if E&E don't approve!) but an approach from the local 'lady of the night' really shocks them.


Jay

pipinheartReviewed Chapter: 6 on 7/27/2005
Poor elrohir, he cut his hand, though Elladan did warn him... His father scowlded him for trying to look as his father looked at his hand. Will is still mad at them, I wonder if he will begin trouble again...


Author Reply: Ah, Will - what is he going to do now??

If I'd been Elrohir, I wouldn't have been able to resist 'looking' either! He has a professional interest now.

French PonyReviewed Chapter: 6 on 7/27/2005
I love the idea of a whore propositioning an Elf. Elves just aren't afraid of Men . . . except for that. I love it.

Unfortunately, I've forgotten how long they were supposed to stay in Mithlond. It seems like a year or so, though, given that Will is already blacksmithing.

And Elrohir gets his first lesson, learning just how much there is still to learn. Seems like Elladan, at least, will get lots of practice. Elrohir seems rather accident-prone. But I bet the fossil was cool.

Author Reply: Elves seem to treat sex as a sacred bond between married couples. That men regard it so casually is completely beyond their comprehension. Poor, 'innocent' Ilmarin!

To be honest, I haven't worked out how long it is since they left Bree - a few months, certainly.

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 6 on 7/27/2005
I felt for Elrohir here. I've done stupid things like that and wished I could press undo. Elrond is good as both healer and father here. For some reason, I really liked the line in which he says to let him see the damage to the dagger. That just felt natural.

Author Reply: It was an 'I can't believe I just did that' moment for poor Elrohir. The main purpose, of course, was to explore the potential of healing oneself, and to give the twins a reason to visit the blacksmith's - and run into Will again.

Elrond was both concerned for Elrohir's upset at breaking the dagger Elladan gave him, and also wanted to take his mind off what was going on. I'm glad it seemed so natural!

Thanks, Daw.

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