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| The 12Days Challenge by Grey Wonderer | 11 Review(s) |
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| Hai Took | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 3/21/2005 |
| Oh, you have me crying! So very sweet and touching! I liked the way you wrote out Ring Four and described Frodo's relationship and feeling for each of those within his ring. I like how some of your "rings" were more concrete then others, very well done! Author Reply: Thank you. I am very glad that it came off well. It is so different from all of the others in this group and so I did worry about it. Thank you for the lovely review! | |
| pipinheart | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 3/21/2005 |
This one was touching. The way it was writing is different from the rest and sets it apart... Rings..In a way is like life and the choices that make us who we become. Some of those our the bonds of friendship,those of a child who hods our heart. Then those of family that even when we go onward is unbreakable. Here Frodo is going,but he looks back on the past and knows all will be well. Merry is the caretaker,and will care for them.. This is a very well written piece...Good job... Author Reply: I don't often do serious and so I am glad that you enjoyed it. Thank you for your kind words. | |
| PIppinfan1988 | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/31/2005 |
| Wow. I actually am speechless. This is extremely powerful: “Sadly, few things are what they appear to be and most are anything but simple. The ring twisted itself about my very soul and wormed its way into my mind, killing some small part of my spirit and replacing it with the deep ache of shame and despair. I often long for my old life and to be as I once was, but I know that I must go on from here. It is the going on that seems to be the hardest. Some days, I hardly see the point in it all.” - GW So, marvelously written and very poignant. I love how you have written Frodo’s thoughts so eloquently. (applause) Take your bow, Grey Wonderer! Thank you for sharing this. Pippinfan Author Reply: My serious side jumped out there for a minute on this one. Glad that you liked it. I just knew I had to use The One Ring for the 'five golden rings' challenge and that is always a serious subject. Glad you like dthe Frodo POV because I don't do that too often. Thanks for the review! | |
| bobo baggins | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/29/2005 |
| This one is sad and reflective, but I loved it since it deals with Frodo. Also, I hope you don't mind, but I just wanted to note that I think you misspelled a word talking about SAm ans Rosie. Isn't it 'doting', and not 'dotting'? Author Reply: I am glad that enjoyed it. I don't write the serious ones very often and so I always worry about them a bit more. Good to know that you liked it. Oh, and any spelling help is appreciated. The author (me) is a very poor speller. LOL | |
| Saoirse | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/20/2005 |
| There were some wonderful lines in this one: 'I smile at Pippin, who, throughout our journey in the dark, has managed to smile back at me. ' This one really shows that although Pippin was young and inexperienced, he was still, in his own way, brave and strong, and gave to Frodo that touch of much-needed light-heartedness to remind him of the innocence he was fighting for. 'He is yet young in years. It is his life that I will wonder about most with the passing of time.' This is very poignant! It really gives you the mindset that although Frodo is leaving, he still will always be thinking of the loved ones he had to leave behind, just as they think of him. And it is very sad to think that Frodo will not get to see him grow up, and will remain unknowing. 'I believe that he knew that today was coming long before I knew.' This shows wonderfully the amount of love Merry has for his cousin, and gives you a glimpse of the pain he must have suffered while watching Frodo slowly slip away once more. 'He is strong in ways that neither Sam nor Pippin are and he will look after both of them.' This is a nice touch, Merry is strong in different ways, and it is good that Frodo has some peace, knowing that his dear cousin will look after the loved ones that he would, since he can no longer be there. 'I may leave to seek peace knowing that he will watch out for the home fires and keep them burning bright.' This is a lovely image. Great job! ^_^ I really liked these! Author Reply: Why, thank you. I am glad that you enjoyed them and thank you for taking the time to let me know which lines left an impression on you. I love reviews like this one. I also do want to let you know how very much I am enjoying your stories posted here on Arda. you write show wonderful emotion and feeling into your stories with only a few lines or a glance between characters. Just amazing! Thank you for reading these. | |
| cher | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/17/2005 |
| This one (five golden rings) is absolutely beautiful. It brought tears to my eyes. Author Reply: Thank you. I appreciate the kind words and the review. I find the serious ones very difficult to write. | |
| Armariel | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/16/2005 |
| Different, yes, but lovely, sweet and sad and very touching. I admire your inventiveness! Curious to see what comes next! Armariel~~~{~@ Author Reply: Thank you! So glad you enjoyed this and thank you for the review! | |
| GamgeeFest | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/15/2005 |
| How sad! And very eloquent! I love his descriptions of his cousins and friends, and his reassurances to himself that they will be fine and look out for each other once he's gone, as well as his realization that he is the one breaking the circle. Well done. Author Reply: Thank you for this lovely review. I am almost never serious and so I do worry when I am trying to be. Thank you for reading and it is very good to hear that the descriptions worked. | |
| Auntiemeesh | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/15/2005 |
| I love the symbolism you've chosen for the five rings. Particularly the bond between the five hobbits, and the examination of each of their personalities. You've really captured each of them so well with just a few words. Author Reply: Thank you. I don't often do serious, but this time it seemed to fit. Dreamflower pointed out to me that in the Ring poem, five is actually the only odd number between one and ten not mentioned, 1 ring, 3 elvin rings, 7 rings for the dwarf lords, and nine for kings of men, but no five. I have no idea why, but it made me have to go in another direction on this one. So glad that you liked it! | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/15/2005 |
| Poor Frodo. Author Reply: Yes, this one was almost too sad, but it was what occured to me for 'five golden rings'. I simply couldn't ignore The One Ring on this verse. Thank you for reading. | |