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| The Hunt by Manderly | 5 Review(s) |
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| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/5/2005 |
| I swear I left a review for this chapter before I went on vacation but it's not here. I must not have clicked post before I closed the window. I was rushing. So sorry this is late. I liked Legolas' interaction with his brothers here, especially over his supposed recklessness--typical older brother reaction. I'm glad he got to keep a watch and I like the little touch that no one else slept. Again, typical older brothers and very sweet. Author Reply: So you have access to the internet again? I saw your chain of reviews and I must thank you for each and every single one of them. This chapter was rather interesting to write and it gave me the chance to work on each brother's character. I didn't want the older brothers to come across as blindly overprotective. | |
| lwarren | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 12/9/2004 |
| "He had just completed his first watch while his brothers slept.....On either side of him, his brothers finally slept." LOL Ah, the totally oblivious nature of the young never ceases to amaze me!!! Legolas is so proud (the male hormones are definitely active here...:-)Eru help them all) of his ability to protect his BIG brothers and finally take his place in the family as an equal...and all big brothers can do is fake sleep, keep watch, and worry!!! I really liked the three separate points of view from the older brothers. Feren is much clearer now in my mind, poor driven elf commander that he is! Still love Tavaro and his games of hide-and-seek with Legolas *G*, and Aldeon was a big surprise...so he can't say no to the elfling (can't say that I blame him, Manderly...can you imagine saying "no" to Legolas? HA!) Anyway, this sets up the three older brothers and the bratling nicely for whatever havoc, trouble or mayhem (or all three) the author *clears throat nervously* has in mind for our four hunters. Great, Manderly...just what I needed this morning before going to grade a bunch of tests!! Thank you! linda Author Reply: Yes, the young can be so oblivious and us poor adults do nothing to shatter that oblivion by becoming very skillful actors if only to keep peace. I must say I've had my fair share of pretending just to keep my daughters cluelessly happy. I am really glad that readers liked the different POVs in this chapter as I wasn't sure that it would work when I was working on it. I thought it was one way to make Legolas' brothers come alive a bit more, rather than just 2-dimensional figures taking up words on a page. And yes, I am setting up for what is to come and your *clears throat nervously* is quite appropriate. Thanks for your wonderful words! | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 12/9/2004 |
| Keeping watch, huh! Who, on whom? Legolas is very lucky in his big brothers, and if he manages to keep safe for long enough to get properly grown up, he will be able to count himself very lucky - in more ways than one! Author Reply: Yes, keeping watch, and what Legolas doesn't know certainly won't hurt his ego! Legolas is lucky to have brothers like these though he probably doesn't realize how lucky he really is at this stage in his life. Thank you for the review! | |
| Firnsarnien | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 12/9/2004 |
| Hooray! 'Nother chappy! ;) Well, I gotta say that Leggy sure is going to deprive his brothers of much sleep if he hangs around with them too much. I really got a kick out of how they all could not sleep, so worried and intent on watching Legolas were they! LOL Poor Leggy, so disappointed nothing happened and his brothers nothing but relieved! I could just see them all give an innaudible sigh at the end of Legg's watch and their eyes glazing into sleep. Priceless! LOLOLOLOL! I especially loved seeing a glimpse into their minds more fully. Their feelings for their youngest brother just make my heart sing and the wonderful insight to those feelings that we got of Aldean, that really gave me such lovely heart pangs! :) *sigh* What a wonderful, informative, mushy, heartfelt, snuggly, insightful, endearing, creative and exceptional chappy! :) *sigh* Yes, you satisfied my Aldeon/Leggy snuggly, protective craving quite nicely here. ;) Heh, heh. Can't wait for the next chappy. Do hurry! Please! :) Author Reply: I agree with you totally. If Legolas continues to keep watch, his brothers will end up as complete zombies by the end of the trip. I am glad you liked the different perspectives in this chapter. It wasn't easy to write and by the time I was finished, I actually had a clearer picture of each of Legolas' brothers myself (and these characters are my own creastion - figure that out). Thank you for your very descriptive review! It really does the heart good to read those words! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 12/8/2004 |
| What a nice chapter! I loved seeing from each of their perspectives. I was struck by how clever and patient you were to write this. I'd have rushed along with my plot and missed this. My beta is always telling me to slow down and this is a good example of why. Author Reply: I am glad this chapter worked. I had a hard time writing it but I thought it was necessary in order to bring out the characters of Legolas' brothers. As for rushing through plots, I think it's all a matter of difference in styles of writing. I tend to be wordy and I can just hear the readers saying 'Oh, get on with it!'. I enjoy your stories as they are now and if you improve any more, they will definitely put me to shame. | |