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| When it Rains by EllaG | 9 Review(s) |
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| lwarren | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/18/2004 |
| Oh now, I'm sitting here blubbering all over my keyboard! What a gentle, sweet memory for Elanor to have! How fortunate to have one that makes an "old" soul feel young again! Lovely, lovely story! And your first, too! Wonderful! linda Author Reply: Ooops! I didn't mean to make you blubber all over your keyboard! Well, maybe I did I guess:) I meant for it to be moving, so I guess I accomplished that! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for stopping in to review:D | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/17/2004 |
| A very nice, gentle story. Thank you. Author Reply: I so glad you liked it! Thanks for reviewing! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/17/2004 |
| I thought this was charming. Elanor is realistic and her memories are wonderful. Author Reply: I'm so happy she came across that way! I wish Tolkien had done more after the quest with her character. Thanks for reviewing! | |
| Meldewen Ilce | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/17/2004 |
| Lovely! Author Reply: I'm glad you enjoyed! Thanks for reviewing:) | |
| shirebound | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/17/2004 |
| Very sweet. (I just reviewed "Flash of Gold", but now I realize you're writing movie-verse -- in which Elanor *would* remember Frodo.) I'm glad the memories are happy ones. Author Reply: Yes, I decided to do movieverse because after all how could I deprive anyone of having happy memories of Frodo? :D Thanks for reviewing! *Dances off singing: "Shirebound reviewed my story! Shirebound reviewe...":D* | |
| Jeodo Brandybuck | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/16/2004 |
| This was your first?! What a wonderful, warm and wistfully happy story! I'm always delighted to read a story with a real beginning, middle and end to it, and even happier to read one with a well-constructed idea behind it. You did a marvelous job depicting Frodo in his last days in the Shire, and drew a beautiful portrait of Sam's daughter, both as a youngster and as an older hobbit. Well done! I'm hoping to read more of your work, and hope that you'll have the ambition to write a longer story soon. Jeodo Brandybuck Author Reply: *Is flattered!* Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Elanor has always been a favorite character of mine, even though we hear so little of her in the books and the movie. EeeeK! A longer story, hmmm. I hope I can get the ambition up to write one too! I have a story that is *tiny* bit longer that also involves Frodo and Elanor which I will be posting tomorrow, so stay tuned:D | |
| Mum's the Word | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/16/2004 |
| What a lovely memory for Elanor to treasure! You've painted some vivid word pictures. I haven't read many "home life" stories from this period in the LOTR saga; this is a pleasant change from the "suffering Frodo" ones. Thank you for sharing this story. I hope you continue to build your story-telling skills. Author Reply: Thank you for your lovely review. I had really hoped that the films would give more insight into Frodo's home life then Tolkien did. Since they didn't though, I had to try and do it myself! Ah, yes. Suffering Frodo. Well I'll admit to reading those fics so long as it's heavy on the comfort. The only reason I see for Frodo to get hurt is for me to make him better! :D | |
| Gentle Hobbit | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/16/2004 |
| This is a lovely start to your fanfic writing. What a beautiful memory for Elanor to keep for her own to cheer her up. I love how it is something like rain that can be such a positive thing for her and to bring back Frodo's cheer (and melancholy). You asked for your writing to be corrected. You have a wonderful use of imagery and a talent for description. There is a bit of a problem with commas though (pesky things!) You often put complete sentences together, separated only by commas; for example, "She felt so old, she wasn't, but she felt she was...", "She could feel Uncle Frodo's arms around her again, the wind sighed in relief", and "Elanor smiled, she knew again without seeing." They need to be made completely separate by a period. For example, you could say, "She felt so old. She wasn't, but she felt she was." It is repetitive though, so perhaps it could be reworded as something like "She felt old beyond her years". It is shorter, but it carries the same message. If you really want them to be a part of the same sentence, then you could use a semi-colon, or even a full colon (if the second sentence, or clause, explains the first one); for example, "Elanor smiled; she knew again without seeing." Anyways, all of that was one awfully long explanation for a small point. I loved your fic -- its gentleness and caring. I hope you write more. Author Reply: I'm so glad you liked it! And thanks so much for the writing help. I tend to just let it out on the page as it comes to me! I'll probably run the thing through later and fix it up! | |
| harrowcat | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/16/2004 |
| I just loved this EllaG. Keep writing. Author Reply: Thanks harrowcat! I'm glad you enjoyed it! I have another short story that will be up tomorrow. Thanks for reviewing:) -EllaG | |