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The First Journey  by Manderly 5 Review(s)
Morgan Jain EmeryReviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/28/2004
I have just finished reading all your stories and i think they are brillant. Your portrayal of the characters and the interaction between the brothers is so well done!

It is amazing that English is not your first language because you write so well, i am English and my grammer is far from great!!

I look forward to reading the rest of your work

Take Care :-)

Author Reply: Thank you very much for your kind and encouraging words! There are so many great stories out there that I am flattered enough that people are reading mine, let alone praise them.

I have been learning the English language for a while now and am relatively comfortable with it, but there are still intances (quite often actually) that I get totally lost. The challenge is always there.

Thank you again for your review.

lwarrenReviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/27/2004
Eeewwwwww! Extra lessons as punishment! A fate worse than...than orcs! Poor Legolas. This chapter had a nice mix of the endearing, adorable Legolas (I love him being Tavaro's slave since ch.2 - if I were Tavaro, I'd definitely milk that situation for all it's worth *vbg*), and the rebellious Legolas (complete with "if looks could kill, Aldeon would be king" and dragging feet!). But you know, Legolas still manages to keep a civil tongue towards his Adar and not compound his problem with disrespect....he seems high spirited, not maliciously getting in trouble just for the heck of it. I think Tavaro and even Thranduil are beginning to see that constant lecturing and keeping the elfling locked up will only spur his rebellious curiosity to greater heights and lengths! Sooooooo, a trip with Tavaro, hmmm? And Tavaro feels like he doesn't need any extra help keeping up with the bratling? Oh my....well, he's not too old to learn a lesson, I suppose.....

linda

Author Reply: Eeewwww is right. It's my guess that Legolas would rather take on orcs anytime than do extra lessons, and I think Thranduil knows that and hence this punishment.

What you said about "if looks could kill, Aldeon would be king" had me laughing. A very apt description of the elfling. I have been on the receiving end of such looks from my kids often enough.

Tavaro may be liberal minded right now but once he gets Legolas all to himself, he might think twice about his ability to handle his little brother. I can't help but think that Thranduil is smirking all the way to bed now that he knows Legolas is off his hands for a while.

Thanks for the review!

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/27/2004
You do these characters so well, Manderly. I really enjoyed this chapter. Legolas is charmingly adoring toward Tavaro who is very sweet toward him. Thranduil is such a good father. He knows exactly the kind of trouble Legolas is likely to get in, and he's concerned for his older sons too.

Author Reply: I am so glad you enjoyed this chapter. I was rather apprehensive about this story because of the lack of action and/or excitement in it and I was afraid that it might be difficult to maintain the readers' interest. Actually, I am still concerned about that but hopefully you will all bear with me.

Thanks for the review.

BodkinReviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/27/2004
Love the image of Legolas being an admiring 'little slave' to his big brothers. Tavaro will be driven to distraction by trying to keep this little monkey safe - and he doesn't stand a chance of success. But at least the elves at home will get a break.

Author Reply: Yes, I think Tavaro will definitely have his hands full being responsible for Legolas, but hopefully he won't come to regret taking his little brother along for this visit. I am sure the guards at the palace will probably break out the wine in celebration when they find out that they will not have to chase after the elfling in Salque's absence.

Thank you for the review.

FirnsarnienReviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/26/2004
Aw, so poor Leggy gets to leave the palace walls...finally?! He's gonna be happy. Although I think Tavaro is really going to need that Mithril rope to tether his brother to his side! And I know he's probably going to be very thankful for the guards! LOL

That little Elfling's got more energy than he knows what to do with. LOL I loved the way he sulked to his room to do his extra lessons. I could just see his feet dragging...I know mine would have dragged! Extra lessons...blech! :P

And again, Legolas said something about Tavaro's injury that caused the mothering to go to his older brother instead of him. However unintention it was, he's a brilliant little Elfling! LOL But certainly, his fear too is understandable. I'm glad he doesn't brood too much over his brothers safety in the woods...although...I do tend to like a brooding Legolas! Heh, heh!

*sigh* And of course, it's always nice to see Aldeon, even if only briefly. I think he's the one I've come to develop a crush on. Then I'd have to say Feren is next and then Tavaro. Although...this story may change that order. LOL *sigh*

I can't wait to see what adventures await these two brothers while they travel to see Herendil. And the bonding that will take place...*double sigh*...I can't wait! :) Hurry with the next chappy please! :) I'm starting to salivate! LOL



Author Reply: I wonder whether a general warning should go out to all of Arda - elfling on the loose. I think by the end of the journey, Tavaro will reconsider his idea of his little brother being refreshing.

Hmm, you like Aldeon, do you? I will have to start thinking of a story where he is more prominent, and Feren too (who I am sorry to say will not be making an appearance here). Hopefully, Tavaro will grow on you too by the end of this story.

Much brotherly bonding coming up, I promise.

As always, thanks for your review!

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