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The First Journey  by Manderly 6 Review(s)
FirnsarnienReviewed Chapter: 13 on 8/15/2004
I'm glad to hear the floodwaters at last receded. I was beginning to think we would have a major disaster on our hands! :(

Ah, Roitar and Leggy asking the almost exact same thing was a nice touch. I can see how the little ones would see their father and brother as able to move mountains. LOL

Poor Leggy, though he tries to deny it, he's really sicker than he wants to be. He just has the most rotten luck! But, it's so nice for us readers! LOL And Tavaro's worry is understandable as well. He loves his little brother and does not want to see him hurt in any way and he also has to think about what he's going to tell Thranduil. I'm sure his father will not be very happy with him that Leggy was hurt and took ill, even though it wasn't his fault. Tavaro has done all he could to make sure Leggy wouldn't come to any harm, as have the two warriors. But, it just seems fate has decided that nothing anyone could do would keep the little Elfing out of harms way. His trials as an Elfing are probably what made his such a wonderful and special Elf when he grows us. :)

I loved the way Leggy told Vayne that his brother was being bossy! I could just see Tavaro's face when he said that! Wonderful line, that one! And this one too: "Yes, Adar," Legolas muttered insolently. OMG! That was great! You can't blame Tavaro for his hovering though. He's got good reason!

Uh oh, Leggy may grieve over Huor's death. That's not going to be good for him. He needs to use his energy for healing, not grieving. Ai! And now look what he's done, the sobbing has made him have another coughing fit! I'm glad Tavaro has decided to take Legolas home. Perhaps there they will have the herbs Leggy needs to get better.

Another nice touch was how Baragallon caught two rabbits hoping to encourage Leggy's appetite. Too bad it didn't work better but Leggy is just too sick and feverish to have much of one no matter what they do.

"Ada?" Legolas blinked and his eyes flickered in confusion.
Tavaro's heart tightened.

That right there told me just how sick Leggy really is. The confusion is not good, the fever is taking hold of him. Poor Tavaro, he must be worried out of his mind. Hmmmm, might be interesting to see more of what Baragallon and Arandun might be feeling seeing their little princeling so ill. After all, they've come to love him so dearly. :)

Wow, this was another great chappy. Wonderful angst! Wonderful worry from Tavaro and everyone else. Wonderful hurt and comfort! *sigh* Just wonderful all around! Can't wait for the next chappy! I do hope you hurry! :)

You know, with each story, you just get better and better at writing. I guess you can say you're like fine wine! You get better with time! :) LOL

Author Reply: Not a very happy homecoming for Legolas and Tavaro, is it? Legolas is probably too sick to worry about anything, but poor Tavaro has to worry both about his sick brother and a possibly angry adar - a pretty lethal combination. Taking on an army of orcs might seem to be the better alternative!

Legolas is having a pretty tough time. I can't imagine him having much experience in being sick so it must be quite frightening for him. No wonder he wants his adar.

Getting better with time? I should point that out to my husband so he can better appreciate me. Thanks for those kind words. I find it, if anything, more difficult to write as I progress from story to story, as I try to be more careful and look at things from all angles before putting the words down. With the first story, I just wrote down anything that came to mind (I cringe to think of all the booboos that must be rampant throughout that story).

KarriReviewed Chapter: 13 on 8/13/2004
I am greatly relieved that the flooding has been dealt with, but I am awfully worried for Legolas. Poor kid. Terrific chapter.

Author Reply: Legolas is not doing too well, is he? He's probably scared witless as well as I don't imagine that he has had much experience with being sick. Thanks for your review.

Rose SaredReviewed Chapter: 13 on 8/13/2004
Cliffie award for the day - gasp. Poor little mite, better get home soon methinks. I'll officially worry until the next chapter. (g)
Rose

Author Reply: Offcially worry until the next chapter? That's a good one! Yes, I think the elfling needs to be home soon too, and drinking the nasty teas that the healer will be brewing up.

lwarrenReviewed Chapter: 13 on 8/13/2004
Ai, Manderly! Poor Legolas! So sick, and worried about death, too! The scene where Tavaro tells him that Huor died was SO SAD! He didn't want Huor and his naneth in the Halls, he wanted them with him! *wails and wrings out hankie* Good chapter, and especially how it touches on Tavaro's worry of disappointing his Adar...but ya know, some things just cannot be helped, and this particular bit of trouble was not Tavaro's fault...or Legolas', for that matter! He was just being his sweet heroic self! (moremoremoremore....soon!) :-)

linda

Author Reply: Dealing with death and getting sick must be totally alien to Legolas. I cannot imagine him having to deal with such things before this - except the death of his naneth, but then he probably can't remember too much of that. I think Tavaro must be silently wailing and wringing out hankies right along with you. Poor guy! I don't think it's their fault either for being in such a predicament. Let's hope Thranduil feels the same way.

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 13 on 8/13/2004
Well, that's kind of scary. Poor Tavaro. He must be worried out of his mind. And even apart from his worry over Legolas, he's going to have to face Thranduil. Legolas sounds really uncomfortable and he's not used to that, given how resistent elves are to illness.

Author Reply: When I was charting out this story, I was wondering whether I was overstepping boundaries in writing about Legolas getting sick as elves are basically immune to diseases that afflict humans. I see Legolas' condition as more of a reaction to the near drowning rather than as falling ill due to some disease. It's a fine drawn line, I know, and I hope I haven't rocked too many boats.

Poor Tavaro is right. The prospect of facing Thranduil with a sick Legolas would give the bravest of warriors the willies.

BodkinReviewed Chapter: 13 on 8/13/2004
Poor Tavaro. Legolas is feeling ill, but I'm sure Tavaro is far more worried. Sickness and death - not a moment for Legolas to be reminded of mortality, poor little lamb.

Tearful partings - horrible things. Even knowing you should live for ever, it is pretty nasty to part from much loved friends.

I hope they get him home to Adar and healers with herbs soon.

Author Reply: I think Tavaro deserves more sympathy here. Legolas just has to put up with feeling sick, but Tavaro meanwhile is worried sick for his brother AND the prospect of facing Thranduil with a sick Legolas in tow.

I hate goodbys. My family lives across the country from me and though I love visting them, I always dread saying goodby when it's time to leave.

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