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Dark Dreams  by Avon 4 Review(s)
Nancy BrookeReviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/13/2004
Another lovely and tender story. I really enjoyed your compassionate portrait of this 'family,' and while I was saddened and a little (appropriately) troubled at those fragile boys it was equally easy to see the men they would grow into. Good job.

Author Reply: Thank you, Nancy! I'm pleased you enjoyed it.

Avon

Raksha The DemonReviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/28/2004
This is a wonderful "wallow", one that I'm sure I'll reread often. (having already reread it twice!)

Imrahil is very well written; I've always thought of him as being the man Faramir could have become if he'd grown up in a happy and supportive family - not that there is much wrong with adult Faramir, but he is clearly not as cheerful and self-assured as his uncle.

The only thing I didn't quite get was Faramir's "Never again?" line; I don't quite understand what he was referencing....




Author Reply: Hi Raksha,

Thanks for the feedback. I'm really pleased tnat you liked it. I don't really know what to say when people say such nice things...

Imrahil is very well written; I've always thought of him as being the man Faramir could have become if he'd grown up in a happy and supportive family

Now there's an inspiring thought. You're so right now I think of it.


The only thing I didn't quite get was Faramir's "Never again?" line; I don't quite understand what he was referencing....

You're not the only one - that one is due for some rewriting. I know what I mean but that's not much use if I'm puzzling my audience. ;-) He meant that never again would Numenor happen - that dark as the future might look it didn't hold 'inescapable darkness'.

Cheers,

Avon

Éile igen BriainReviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/27/2004
How DO you churn out these wonderful stories so quickly! Great characterization and a lovely story.

The ending is a bit off. I feel kinda like I been left hanging. My suggestion would be to leave off the last two sentances and change:
“Never again,” I whispered. “I swear.”

...to something like:
“Never again,” I whispered, hoping my words would prove true.

::Shrugs:: Just my 2 cents... :) FYI, I finally emailed you on 'Remembering Boromir,' sorry it took so long...

Author Reply: How DO you churn out these wonderful stories so quickly!

Right at the moment I'm darned if I know - stories just seem to be leaping at me! I'm usually nowhere near this prolific.

Thanks for the suggestion about the ending - as soon as I get some time I think I'm going to try it a couple of ways - one with an expanded vision and one with no vision and see what happens.

BTW - thank you VERY much for the wonderful beta you sent me on 'Remembering Boromir'. I will e-mail you proper thanks - it's just that stories keep attacking me ;-)

Avon

JulesReviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/27/2004
This is a wonderful story. I loved all of the characters.

Thanks for writing

Jule

Author Reply: Thansk for the feedback, Jules!

Avon

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