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Dabbles in Drabbles  by LKK 4 Review(s)
KalimaReviewed Chapter: 7 on 1/28/2005
Very good; the despertaion of battle we sometimes forget about, we who know how it will turn out.

K

Jay of LasgalenReviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/13/2004
Ah! I understand now! A very nice drabble, about one of my favourite Legolas scenes. I first read this on a yahoo group, and wondered about the line "All who can have now got safe within, Aragorn," he called. "Come back!" Who was 'he' when the piece was from Legolas's POV? Seeing the version with the different formatting here makes all the difference!



Jay


Author Reply: The formatting is essential, isn't it? I was disappointed when the Yahoo group lost the italics. :(

I suppose I could have left out the "he called" from the quote. I would have gained two more words if I had done so. But I liked the effect of being inside Legolas's mind, then stepping outside it for the quote, then popping back inside for the final thoughts.

I'm glad you got the chance to read the drabble as I intended it to be read. Thanks for the review, Jay!

NilmandraReviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/12/2004
How sad it must have been to say that, knowing that friends like Gimli were nowhere to be seen!

Author Reply: You're right. It must have been a very hard thing to say. The two were inseparable after Lothlorien -- except in battle. That night of Gimli's disappearance would have been hard to endure. :(

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/12/2004
Nice sense of urgency here, LKK. "Orcs overwhelm us!" Yes indeed.

And Gimli is lost, although actually he's just out of sight, not dead, thank Eru.

Author Reply: Thank you for the review, daw. I tried to balance the sense of urgent need and fleeting thoughts that I thought Legolas would have in the situation with the reader's need to be given enough information to know what was happening. With only 100 words to work with (and 13 of them provided by JRRT in this case), I found it a hard balance to maintain. I hope it worked.

Thank goodness, Gimli wasn't dead. In the book, Legolas and Aragorn are remarkably calm about his absense. I like to think they were both trying to hide their true concern so as not to worry the other.


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