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| Coming Home by SilverMoonLady | 2 Review(s) |
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| Imhiriel | Reviewed Chapter: 20 on 4/24/2007 |
| All in all I truly enjoyed reading the story (devoured it in one looong setting), even if it perhaps doesn't sound so from some of my comments *g*. There are some intriguing premises and plot points, and you have executed them carefully and believably. Also your characterisations ring true, and the relationship between Merry and Pippin is depicted perfectly. I think that sometimes important facts that have much influence in shaping the background or the plot itself are passed over only quickly or cursorily, or are only shown after the fact when their impact is diminished. A misspelling that occured twice: it's "Pelennor Fields" correctly, not "Pellenor". Once wrote Berilac instead of Reginard (in #13. Made me wonder at first if the Thain had ended his hostility against the Brandybucks *g*). You also have several occurrences of "loose" instead of "lose". Some of the bleak side-effects and consequences (both victims and perpetrators) of the Troubles you show are quite unusual and daring, and very sad. It was shocking to witness how low a Hobbit could sink into evilness. Maybe Tengo's deeds are even more shocking than Lotho's, because there is something so personally insidious and cruel about it. | |
| Grey Wonderer | Reviewed Chapter: 20 on 4/27/2004 |
| Thank you for this story. Your Pippin is neither a fool nor a child and he earns his father's respect with his honor. I also loved Estella and Merry. They were perfect. Merry's mother, Esmeralda was a delight. I got so caught up in this that I read it all in one setting and enjoyed every line. Though the death of Pervinca was very sad, it did show how much had been taken from the Shire in all of this. Also enjoyed how you showed the bond between Pippin and Merry throughout the story. This is a very excellent story. Author Reply: Thank you very much! Yes, Pippin is no fool, even if it's easier for some to see him that way. Glad the sadder/harder parts were no deterrent to your enjoyment:) Life is tough, but that's how we find ourselves. It is ironic that someone like myself who is so fond of these people puts them through so much torture, don't you think? *grin* | |