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Adagio   by Rose Sared 4 Review(s)
TithenFeredirReviewed Chapter: 3 on 11/5/2005
I liked the opening, with Gimli's thoughts punctuated by his physical activity. In the first section you created a strong feeling of the world according to dwarves: their perfect ease being underground, their absorption in their work and craft. But then Gimli does not quite fit the mold any more. I loved the bit where he spotted Earendil, and your lovely description:

"...Earendil, visible even through the misted window, sailing his ship forever in the frost bright heavens."

I don't think dwarves normally bother looking up to the stars much. He must have learned that from Legolas.

I so enjoyed the build-up to Gleowyn's suicide attempt, then the dramatic way she cut her bodice and her hair and the way her hair was blown to blind her and smear her blood. Every detail was an picture of her desolation and anguish.

But I'm glad Gimli stopped her. Obviously this sets up how Gimli was accused of assault. It was beautifully done. ~TF

Author Reply: Well he jokes about it, but there is no doubt that Legolas has ruined Gimli for polite (dwarven) company, and vice-versa. Something new in Middle-earth was formed by their friendship - and new is sometimes uncomfortable.
Thank you again for your review - poor Gleowyn, melodramitic to the core but hurting as only the young allow themselves to hurt.
Rose

CalliopeReviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/25/2004
What a lovely tale! You've moved our friends forward in time very
nicely, with an attention to detail that gives your story a lot
of texture. Your use of OCs is exceptional. My heart is breaking
for Gleowyn.

My only suggestion is to be sure and use breaks in the text to
indicate a change of scene.

I look forward eagerly to the rest!

Author Reply: Thank you for your kind words and I am glad you are enjoying the story. The text has been edited so much that I kinda don't see the errors any more so thanks for the heads up.
Rose

Jay of LasgalenReviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/24/2004
Oh, poor Gleowyn! I can see that Gimli is going to look after her, no doubt take her to Aglarond to work in the smithies, which will cause all the trouble.

BTW, your story synopsis says 'complete'. It should be 'in progress', I take it?

Jay

Ms. WhatsitReviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/24/2004
I like Gleowyn, even if she is a klutz. And Gimli's so sweet to her. It was also touching to read about how Gimli was comforted by the plant Legolas gave him. That was a nice addition.

I hope there's more coming!

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