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Elf Up A Tree  by Lily Frost 1 Review(s)
KarriReviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/29/2004
That was very sweet and nicely written. :-) There are a couple typos though. The most distracting one is this: “I’m going to go get adar,” cried Elrohir “wait here and don’t fall down!” With that he broke into a run back towards the last homely house and left his brother in the tree, stuttering in protest.

Since Elrohir is up the tree, the ought probably be Elladan running to help.

Also: "A though occured to him,...." I think is maybe"A thought"?

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