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When the King Comes Back ( Brandy Hall )  by Dreamflower 3 Review(s)
PSWReviewed Chapter: 4 on 9/6/2016
Ah, Merry. :-) That's the way to a lass's heart -- tell her about the romances. The rest can come later, if need be....

As for seeing the problems twelve years later (from your last response) -- well, that just means you've gotten better, right? :-) When I look at some of the stuff I wrote years ago (thankfully tucked away where no one will eve see) I want to go hide my head under a pillow somewhere! :-P But no matter -- it was an enjoyable story regardless, and I'm enjoying this one so far as well. Thanks for writing!

Author Reply: Yes, it certainly is! I got to wondering what Merry might do to court her--after all, he couldn't take her to the movies in the Shire! But he could tell her stories that were the equivalent of "chick flicks", LOL!

I do see a lot of improvement, which is nice. And there are still new folks like you discovering these older stories, and a lot of older readers still tell me these are their favorites, which makes me feel good.

But there are still a lot of things I'd do differently if I were writing them now!

GryffinjackReviewed Chapter: 4 on 12/26/2005
One thing I forgot to mention - should it not be "Eomer King" instead of "King Eomer"? As I recall, it was always "Theoden King" in canon. Am I wrong? You've certainly read the books and studied them way more than I have. Nitpicking, I know, but that's because it's such a great story and I know you care so much, that I want it to reach its full potential.

Author Reply: Yes, that was the way it was said in Rohan. I had Merry put it that way in talking to Estella, as it would sound more natural to hobbits, I thought. But on reflection, I think perhaps he would have still used the Rohirric form in spite of that, as he was so proud of his standing as a Rider of Rohan. Thanks for bringing it to my attention!

GryffinjackReviewed Chapter: 4 on 12/25/2005
Oh, that Merry! He's quite the romancer! He should make sure to send a "thank you" note to Faramir, Eowyn, Aragorn, and Arwen. It's so lovely to see Merry's and Estella's romance blossom and bloom. I had to laugh when Estella got jealous of Eowyn and Merry crossed his arms with a smirk and enjoyed informing her that Eowyn was betrothed. Very humourous, yet realistic.

Yes, Sam has become much more confident and is doing well. I think seeing Sam, Merry, and Pippin doing so well in the few years since their return from destroying the Ring plays a great part in Frodo's decision to leave Middle Earth. Although Frodo's constant pain and the lingering darkness was a major reason, it made it much easier for him to leave knowing that his dearest loved ones, Sam, Merry, and Pippin, would be fine without him.

Author Reply: Merry's been of age four years. He's also, I think, pretty smooth for a hobbit. I'm sure he could tell how Estella's interest was piqued by his mention of Eowyn and the betrothal. And, well, there weren't any movies. A nice romantic story would be a good substitute for a chick flick, don't you think? *grin*

I agree. Frodo needed to know that his dear ones would be all right without him; I am quite sure that was one reason he truly did need to return to the Shire for a while. I don't think he would have take Arwen's offer any sooner, not without assurances that Sam, Merry and Pippin were thriving.

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