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| Orc Patrol by Igenlode Wordsmith | 4 Review(s) |
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| nSYaGaHUTH | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 2/8/2012 |
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| AFriedman | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 2/27/2006 |
| You've gotten pretty far with a very good, rather canonical portrayal of orcs. I found the colloquial, coarse language style engaging. Your main departure from canon seems to be the articulateness of the captain. Curse words can impede communication but your orc-captain doesn't seem to let that happen. In fact his language is quite creative and varied, even if it isn't cultured and refined. I really liked many of the scenes and the images--e.g. I thought the simile at the beginning was dead-on in terms of characterization and a wonderful way to begin, and I also liked the scene where the captain appeared to be deliberately deceiving his(?) subordinates but in reality was just extremely impulsive. (It's true that motives are often misinterpreted.) However, I have a few questions. I am wondering what the general theme of the story is--what new insights you are revealing about orcs, men, etc., and why you would have written the story. I also felt like you were taking the situations and the characters out of context. Aren't the orcs hungry? (In the Hobbit it says they are "always hungry.") In addition, don't orcs get scared? Your captain talks about how wonderfully easy it is to pick off the Men, but I suspect he'd be afraid of some of the more dangerous situations you describe later in the story. Having them ravenously hungry or horribly frightened would probably make them more sympathetic to the reader, if only because their actions have more of a context, but I think adding this aspect would be appropriate if your goal is to get inside an Orc. --A. Friedman | |
| Patty | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 4/3/2004 |
| What can I say?!! . . horrible . . . beautiful . . I LIKE it!! It's just revolting enough to make me want to read it again and again. What on earth does that say about ME??!! | |
| Karri | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/9/2004 |
| Well done! Nicely written and very orc-ish. | |