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| Hell's Kitchen by GTA Otaku | 2 Review(s) |
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| Grey Wonderer | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 12/27/2003 |
| Very funny! Loved the exploding potatoes! They may have a new weapon to be used later on in battle with this potato thing of Pippin's. LOL Author Reply: Wow, can you just imagine fighting in the Mines of Moria, and then hundreds of potatoes jumping out everywhere and hitting the orcs. Priceless. The plot bunny is all yours. | |
| Miriel | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 12/22/2003 |
| Hey, this was something I really enjoyed. Just a couple of things though. First, when you have someone directly addressing someone, you need to put a comma before and after the name. Example: "Sam, get me the potholder!" or "And that, Frodo, is how it's done." Second, watch your puncuation. You have periods where there should be question marks. Anyhow, this was wonderful and I loved it. Poor Pippin. I liked Aragorns "this could go one of two ways. " Brilliant. :-) Author Reply: Thank you Miriel. Glad to hear that you enjoyed it. I admit I do have a tendency to get a bit lazy with my grammer when I'm writing, I'll have to watch that in the future. | |