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| To See by Eredadain | 11 Review(s) |
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| sarah | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 12/23/2003 |
| Hi, thanks for letting me know the second chapter was up. I like it a lot. The poem was eerie. It's a very interesting story. I look forward to more. Sarah. | |
| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 12/18/2003 |
| This gets better and better. Very compelling and gripping plot, well written and the descriptions are perfect. The details -- waiting for the radiator to cool, in particular -- help to make the story seem very real. Now I'm just dying to see what happens next, and what other characters we'll see introduced. Your original character is very well done, but LOTR fics should always be ultimately about Tolkien's world, which usually means his characters, particularly in a story set after the time of Middle-earth. Thank you for another great chapter. I hope you continue! Lamiel Author Reply: Lamiel, Thanks for your patience and kind comments. The action between Gandalf and Sauron will heat up in later chapters. Chris too will evolve. He is a main character, but I think he will act more as a fulcrum later on. Since this is ME later in history, and not our earth, bringing in other characters that are not deities is possible, but I haven't worked that out yet. I'm still learning, and this story is young. | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 12/18/2003 |
| Bell Falls? Belfalas! I love trying to figure out what all this stuff is. And I fervently hope that the man in the grey coat with the long white hair is Gandalf. I really like the sense of place that you give. Sometimes when reading a story, I feel that the descriptions of scenery are just pasted in, but yours really work to give the reader a sense of where we are in ME, which is fun as well as effective. Author Reply: daw, I always felt that scene was one of JRRT's strenghths. I'm not trying to copy, just hopefully create as vivid a world. Hope the details don't get too dull, though. | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 12/17/2003 |
| Oh, the excitement grows! I am hoping the white bearded figure is Gandalf (not Santa Clause :D) - and clearly the Palantir is still showing some of what is happening in the world. Nice use of detail - very rich descriptions of the places and people. Author Reply: Nilmandra, Thanks for the comments, and yes (not to give it away ;)) but Gandalf does return. S is after all G's historic enemy. But hey, that's an intriguing idea. What if G never actually left ME, got fat, settled in Forachel (sp?), enslaved the remaining elves, and became Father Christmas? Naw...that'd be silly... | |
| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 12/14/2003 |
| Very intriguing, and very well written. This is the first futuristic LOTR fic I've read that seems plausible and believable. There are some beautiful descriptions here - particularly the detail of the landscape and sunset. I'm looking forward to more. Lamiel Author Reply: Lamiel, Thank you. I wanted to move Middle Earth forward, but I didn't want it to be "our" world, either. One of the saddest things in life is the realization that what is is not long to be. The Elves know this. | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 12/13/2003 |
| I'm glad to see this posted! I had a lot of fun while I was reading this, trying to figure out who the characters were and what the geography pointed to. Also, I was impressed by the imagery, particularly that of the snake - the truck, for instance, or the words that "coil" at Chris's feet. You're very patient in laying this out in realistic detail. I'm looking forward to seeing where you take it. | |
| sarah | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 12/13/2003 |
| Very interesting start. I like the plot and would like to see more. It was fun reading. Sarah. Author Reply: Sarah, Thak you. Chapter 2 is done, and 3 is coming together. Chris learns more about the Palantir, and G and S have a little scrap. | |
| Antigone_Q | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 12/12/2003 |
| An interesting premise. You write well, and I'll be watching to see where your story is headed. Author Reply: Antigone_Q, Thanks, I'm learning. | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 12/12/2003 |
| This is a wonderful and intriguing start. I am enjoying both the language and writing, as well as the plot. The story flows well, and the use of imagery is very well done. You have created a picture in my mind, and I feel like I see what Chris does. And Samuel is terrifying! Knowing my Tolkien, the city is Minas Tirith, the river bed the Anduin and the round object the Palantir. The tusk is of an oliphaunt, perhaps one that fell in Ithilien and washed downstream, or that died on the Pelennor. I am looking forward to more. | |
| Niere of Gondolin | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 12/12/2003 |
| Outstanding start. I am definitely hooked. Can't wait to see where this one goes. Your writing style is outstanding, you clearly express your thoughts and you are able to use the language well. Please post additional chapters soon, this one is going into my Favorites list. Regards, Niere Author Reply: Niere, Thank you. I'm new at this and your comments are appreciated. The action will heat up in Chapter 3. | |