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The Warrior  by daw the minstrel 19 Review(s)
pipinheartReviewed Chapter: 3 on 10/12/2005
Legolas did get the unfortune to have Tinar in his patrol, he is too sure of himself. Legolas seems to be doing well, and even seen Bean and dwarfs...

Author Reply: Legolas is having a good time (except for Tinar, of course).

EredadainReviewed Chapter: 3 on 12/11/2003
I've read chapters 1 - 3 and am looking forward to more. It's gratifying to see Legolas develope, both as a warrior and as a "person". Daw does a great job fleshing out his LOTR persona, and I think she adds some critical (and needed) depth to his character. Beliond is a pain, but critical to L's growth. Will they have a knock down drag out at some point?

Author Reply: Thank you for the kind words, Eredadain! I cannot imagine writing a knock down drag out between Legolas and his keeper. Thranduil would kill him. Or maybe kill both of them. I'm in the process of writing some slow softening in their relationship. It's the weekend now and I have no more students to pain me, so I can write!

Are you going to post?

Tapetum LucidumReviewed Chapter: 3 on 12/8/2003
First patrol - Legolas must have been extremely excited. I am glad you started with him having a more positive impression of Beliond. That will be good for their relationship. Tinar may be the most reliable scout in the patrol but did Maltanaur warn Beliond about the rude elf's tendency to shoot keepers in the arm? I wonder if Legolas knows that story?

I am sure the prince wanted to be the first to sound the alarm but it would not be appropriate. The rookie is rarely the first to find something. Good job with that one. Galorion is something of a diplomat. He chose his words carefully when dealing with Beam. You had me snickering over Legolas' reaction to Beam's greeting. It was typical of a young, somewhat egotistical male. It is cool to be singled out as someone special, even though it is dangerous. Having Beam and Galorion glance at Legolas when discussing the notification of the king was also well done. Now the patrol leaders have to worry about information following the chain of command and whether or not the king will know everything they do. The captain can't be too excited about that. I am sure that Nitha would be happy to see Legolas. I imagine she has completely idolized him by now. It would be interesting to see his reaction to her fawning.

Your confrontation with the dwarves was a lot of fun. You can feel the animosity between the two races. Favorite line: "the Dwarves would be dead if either of them so much as checked the position of the axe on his back." I imagine they will follow the path of the dwarves to see what they have discovered. I enjoyed Legolas' first patrol as much as he did.

Author Reply: I had totally forgotten about Tinar shooting Maltanaur! You are right: Beliond should be careful. I'm thinking Legolas does not know about that. Eilian is actually pretty discrete about things that happen when he is in some sort of command role.

I think a visit to Nitha is in order. She would be about 17 now. I would have to think fairly carefully about how that meeting might go. ;-)

Legolas's first patrol must have been reassuring for him and for Beliond. He did OK and the two of them learned a little more about the degree to which they can trust one another.

Freakish as it makes me seem, Tapetum, I was just logging in to post my next chapter when I found your review. I'm excited about this story now.

caz - bazReviewed Chapter: 3 on 12/8/2003
yes, that did seem quite exciting for a first patrol but i suppose he is on the eastern border patrol which you hinted earlier was more dangerous than some others.
i'm glad him and Beliond seem to be getting on slightly better - in a way.
until next chapter.

Author Reply: The eastern border patrol should be interesting, I think, because it's in one of the few places in ME where Men,Dwarves, and Elves live close together. Good training for someone who will be wandering among all the races in a few hundred years with the Fellowship!

The KarenatorReviewed Chapter: 3 on 12/7/2003
What an exciting first day on patrol! Men and dwarves. I find that I kind of like Beliond. I think there's something deeper, a story to be told where he is concerned. He's obvious not altogether happy about his new assignment, but I can't believe for a second that the king would have posted someone to watch over his son that was not capable of handling his personal feelings. Legolas and Beliond have gotten off to a rocky start, but eventually they will have to come to some sort of understanding. I can't see either of them asking for a change from the king. And I know that they don't because he's still around when Legolas goes to Imladris...still going at it, but settled into a valued relationship. I couldn't help but think when Legolas and Beliond escorted the dwarves from the forest that if they had just been civil, then the dwarves would have told them what they knew! Oh prejudice rears its ugly head. The dwarves may not have, but they would have certainly had a better chance. Of course, they didn't know the dwarves knew something, but it seems a little diplomacy would be a good practice to begin with even though the dwarves were trespassing. But then, I'm just standing over here in the safety of the tree tops with a wide view of everything. I loved Legolas's realization that Ithilden might not tell Thranduil everything. Yes,Ithilden is bold,indeed! Gives Legolas a whole new perspective of his older brother. Another good chapter, Daw. I look forward to finding out what's going on in the forest. Trouble just seems to follow Legolas, but, then, I think that's your fault!...and much to our delight! Karen

Author Reply: Good and wise King Thranduil would indeed have chosen very carefully when he handed his youngest son's safety into someone keeping. That doesn't mean that Beliond is ever going to be Mr. Congeniality, of course!

What a good observation about how Elven prejudice kept them from learning something. Galorion (the lieutenant) was actually the most polite of the bunch, which I guess is why he's an officer. And he wasn't happy when Tinar was openly scornful. But they did blow their chance to get quick news.

And I have to admit I was tickled when I was able to give Legolas a new view of Ithilden. I have gradually come to admire Legolas's oldest brother more and more. He's tough and the realm is very lucky to have him.

LeraReviewed Chapter: 3 on 12/7/2003
It was great seeing Legolas in a completely new experience. Good ole' Tinar. I wouldn't mind seeing him take an unexpected swim either. Perhaps he has a very important role to play however. Maybe Legolas will be so annoyed by Tinar, that Beliond will be a relief.
I remember Nitha! I hope Legolas does go see her. That story was my favorite. I love seeing Legolas interact with little kids. Whatever happened to Amdir? Did Legolas really try to be his big brother or anything?
GOd Bless.

Author Reply: "Perhaps he has a very important role to play" - sort of like Gollum, you mean? :-) At least he provides someone besides Beliond for Legolas to get annoyed with.

Nitha should be about 17 now. I think that a little visit to her would be interesting!

Amdir is stored away on a shelf somewhere. He's a good 20 years younger than Legolas, so he wouldn't have been around the novice training fields. And I just have too many OCs to keep them all in play at once. I may use Amdir again some day.

nanethReviewed Chapter: 3 on 12/7/2003
Legolas is having fun on his first patrol, and so are we! Just wondering, how long do your elves stay on patrol before they return home for leave?

Great chapter. I'm enjoying your story (as usual!).

Author Reply: I think I said that Eilian got a leave every three months, although he got home more often if he was escorting wounded or serving as a messenger. But we are going to see Thranduil in the next chapter because we've been away from him long enough. ;-)

ArbelethielReviewed Chapter: 3 on 12/7/2003

My Internet connection has been playing up recently, and I missed chp 2 :( On the other hand, I had *2* chapters to read when the Internet was back up, so itís all good :D

I think I was about as excited as Legolas. I liked meeting the Men again, and I would not mind seeing more of Ninath. On the other hand, the Dwarves were a lot less friendly, and the hints they dropped are downright frightening. I mean, if the patrolling Elves don't know what the Dwarves are referring to, there is some trouble ahead.

Legolas may think that Manaltaur respects Eilian as a warrior and everything, but Iíd bet that their beginning was er... stormy :) Especially knowing Eilian :)


Author Reply: Oh you are so right! My guess would be that Maltanaur must have wondered what sins he had committed to deserve having Eilian on his hands.

And indeed, there is trouble ahead. Thank goodness!

FadesintothewestReviewed Chapter: 3 on 12/7/2003
Thanks for the well wishes Daw!

Oh and I loved this chapter devoted to Legolas, but I have to admit, I like it when the chapters are split into both Legolas and Eilian.

Author Reply: I intended to write about both Legolas and Eilian in this chapter, but then it got too long so I had to move the Eilian material. I love the guy though, and can't neglect him for long.

FadesintothewestReviewed Chapter: 3 on 12/7/2003
Beliond is beginning to take notice that maybe Legolas isn't as incompetent as he seems to think he is. There is going to be excitement as I fear what the Dwarves hinted at is something that will end up in the Elves path!

Author Reply: I *hope* there will be excitement! And indeed, the Dwarves' hints will eventually come back into play. In the meantime, Beliond and Legolas have to get to know one another a little more. That will be fun.

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