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| The Grief and Guilt of a Ringbearer by Cantora Eledhwen | 2 Review(s) |
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| JULES6 | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 11/25/2003 |
| Keep up the great work Cantora - I really like this story - you are doing great. Hope to see more soon. You keep writing and I will keep reviewing. JULES Author Reply: I will definately try and read your stories. It may have to wait until after the holidays, or at least until after Thanksgiving. Traveling and exams and all that... Thanks for the review!!! -Cantora | |
| Marilla | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 11/25/2003 |
| Well, I've finished reading all you've got posted to this point, and I will continue reading this fic. A correction, this time gramatical in nature. Frodo was not "in the wrong spot when a very large troll THROUGH his javelin," he was "in the wrong spot when a very large troll THREW his javelin." Although they sound the same, "through" is a preposition and "threw" is the past tense of the verb "throw." If it seems like all I ever do is criticize your writing, I'm sorry. I really do like it - your writing style is easy to read and flows nicely, and you do a fairly good job of characterization. It's just that when I see something that jumps out at me as needing correction, I want to comment on it. It's the perfectionist in me coming to the fore. Author Reply: *huggles Marilla* Oh my goodness, I love your reviews! They give WONDERFUL advice and point out such embarrasing errors as the one above... *hangs head in shame* I can't believe some of those...! You know a lot about Tolkien, not to mention grammar. I will definately try and go back and fix all of that after the holidays! *head swims* I'm so busy... New chappie for GAGOAR coming this weekend probably. "...fairly good job of characterization." *snort* Thanks! I try. It is difficult to characterize such complex characters, though. Tolkien was very detailed. Keep reviewing! I love them! Don't be afraid to hurt my feelings. I'd rather be a little disappointed that my chappie wasn't "perfect" rather than keeping a mistake up there for all the world to see. Thank you!!! -Cantora www.youngwriters.blogspot.com | |