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The Unquenchable Light by Virtuella | 3 Review(s) |
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Lindelea | Reviewed Chapter: 23 on 4/23/2025 |
Oops, accidentally posed the earlier review before I finished reading the chapter. I have an idea about the "memento". We'll see if I'm right. I'm sorry for the women and children who are waiting for their men to return. "the story of the elves and their killer booze" sounds like an awesome topic for a raucous drinking song. Or maybe an anti-drinking song? By the way, the pun is awesome in its awfulness. And now I will retire the word "awesome" for at least 24 hours due to overuse. It's rather satisfying to see Sauron hoisted on his own petard, or whatever the saying is. Nice tie-in to the main story. Lastly, "step by hairy little step" is... quite evocative, for starters. Author Reply: Thanks for all your comments! I rather think of Kuz as a kind of mirror of the Shire. A land of plenty, far from trouble, favoured by istari, but then confronted with the evil out there and having to respond in a way that is appropriate for them. I would go with "well-grounded." And it may be that I am a tiny bit in love with Hamujil, which seems strange, but I tend to crush on fictional characters, just usually not my own. I didn't set out to write a commentary on the state of the real world, but I found over time that it just seeped in. | |
Lindelea | Reviewed Chapter: 23 on 4/23/2025 |
I suddenly saw in my head what needed to be done and I did it. Considering the topic of discussion, these sound like the words of a very secure man. Or maybe I mean "self-possessed" or "well-grounded". Though he may also have taken a page out of his wife's book, from the conversation. So that's what's happened to the ambassador. (Did, perhaps, steam come out of his ears, or does that only happen in cartoons?) Interesting penal code. It sounds similar to the Shire as I've written it, except for the idea of banishment which I don't remember if it came out of my own head or if I can hang the idea on the hook of something JRRT wrote or hinted at. Though not really a solution, I suppose it might work mostly as a deterrent for a peace-loving people. Re: Jarin and language. I remember when I started dreaming in another language (call it "language 3" for reasons that will hopefully become clear a few lines down), and then thinking in that language instead of my mother tongue (aka "language 1") during a year-long study abroad program. Getting the jokes is an interesting measure of fluency; I hadn't thought of that, but it would require close acquaintance with local idioms. A phenomenon that has fascinated me for years is that when a friend and I were travelling and met some folks from another country (whose language I had learned in high school; call it "language 2"), to talk to them, I had to translate my thoughts internally from my language 3 to language 1 to language 2, and do the opposite when translating what they said to us. I could not translate directly from language 3 to language 2. I am still not sure why. Unless the roads are smooth or the supply carts have springs or some other form of suspension, I'd imagine riding in a cart to be rather uncomfortable even if it spares Jarin's legs. Like the nightly light parade, it probably helped. Oh! watching someone throw pots on a potter's wheel has always fascinated me. A glassblower is similarly fascinating. This is a strangely beautiful thought: Strange how they looked the same even so far from home. The light of the Powers, shining on all. And now Tilar's trial. Hmmm. Maybe a just punishment would to be send her off in Sauron's direction, following in the Ambassador's footsteps (or the footsteps of those who carried him away, that is)? Hmm. A "dragon" scale that weighs the conscience, eh? They're putting her on a weight-loss diet of sorts. Just a different kind of weight or mass or something. Aha. Here, too, it seems, "the love of money is the root of all evil", perhaps? (On a personal note, I find this discussion depressing, considering the state of the world today. I won't say what modern-day person(s) Olan reminds me of because I don't think RL politics belong in a fanfic archive, but he is a bright spot nonetheless.) What will the Ezens say? It's the burning question of the day... or week... or month... or whatever. Lovely chapter! Looking forward to more when you have the time and inclination to write and post. | |
Leithian | Reviewed Chapter: 23 on 4/17/2025 |
This in one of the best chapters in this story! Hamujil and Majani are so sweet together. ๐๐ฐ ๐ต๐ฉ๐ฆ๐ฎ ๐ด๐ฉ๐ฆ ๐ธ๐ข๐ด ๐ฏ๐ฐ๐ต ๐ข ๐รป๐ป๐ข๐ณ ๐ธ๐ฐ๐ฎ๐ข๐ฏ ๐ธ๐ช๐ต๐ฉ ๐๐ณรข ๐ข๐ฏ๐ค๐ฆ๐ด๐ต๐ฐ๐ณ๐ด, ๐ฃ๐ถ๐ต ๐ข ๐๐ณรข ๐ธ๐ฐ๐ฎ๐ข๐ฏ ๐ญ๐ช๐ท๐ช๐ฏ๐จ ๐ช๐ฏ ๐รป๐ป. I liked the interaction Jarin had with the Kra. It is nice to see they accept her as one of their own. ๐๐ฆ ๐ฅ๐ช๐ด๐ฎ๐ช๐ด๐ด๐ฆ๐ฅ ๐ต๐ฉ๐ฆ ๐ญ๐ข๐ด๐ต ๐ฎ๐ฆ๐ฏ ๐ธ๐ช๐ต๐ฉ ๐ธ๐ฐ๐ณ๐ฅ๐ด ๐ฐ๐ง ๐ฑ๐ณ๐ข๐ช๐ด๐ฆ ๐ง๐ฐ๐ณ ๐ต๐ฉ๐ฆ๐ช๐ณ ๐ฆ๐ฏ๐ฅ๐ถ๐ณ๐ข๐ฏ๐ค๐ฆ ๐ข๐ฏ๐ฅ ๐ต๐ฉ๐ฆ๐ฏ ๐ธ๐ฆ๐ฏ๐ต ๐ฉ๐ฐ๐ฎ๐ฆ, ๐ธ๐ฉ๐ฆ๐ณ๐ฆ ๐ฉ๐ช๐ด ๐ธ๐ช๐ง๐ฆ ๐ธ๐ช๐ต๐ฉ๐ช๐ฏ ๐ต๐ฉ๐ฆ ๐ง๐ช๐ณ๐ด๐ต ๐ต๐ธ๐ฆ๐ฏ๐ต๐บ ๐ฎ๐ช๐ฏ๐ถ๐ต๐ฆ๐ด ๐ฑ๐ณ๐ฆ๐ด๐ฆ๐ฏ๐ต๐ฆ๐ฅ ๐ฉ๐ช๐ฎ ๐ธ๐ช๐ต๐ฉ ๐ข ๐ต๐ฐ-๐ฅ๐ฐ ๐ญ๐ช๐ด๐ต. This made me laugh so much, and I don't even know why. In fact the whole paragraph on Ezen Kemra is amusing. ๐๐ฏ ๐ฉ๐ช๐ด ๐ข๐ณ๐ณ๐ฐ๐จ๐ข๐ฏ๐ค๐ฆ, ๐ช๐ฏ ๐ฉ๐ช๐ด ๐ฆ๐ข๐จ๐ฆ๐ณ๐ฏ๐ฆ๐ด๐ด ๐ต๐ฐ ๐ข๐ฏ๐ต๐ช๐ค๐ช๐ฑ๐ข๐ต๐ฆ ๐ฉ๐ช๐ด ๐ต๐ณ๐ช๐ถ๐ฎ๐ฑ๐ฉ ๐ธ๐ฉ๐ฆ๐ฏ๐ฆ๐ท๐ฆ๐ณ ๐ฉ๐ฆ ๐ญ๐ฐ๐ฐ๐ฌ๐ฆ๐ฅ ๐ช๐ฏ๐ต๐ฐ ๐ต๐ฉ๐ฆ ๐ฑ๐ข๐ญ๐ข๐ฏ๐ตรญ๐ณ, ๐ฉ๐ฆ ๐ฑ๐ข๐ช๐ฅ ๐ฏ๐ฐ ๐ข๐ต๐ต๐ฆ๐ฏ๐ต๐ช๐ฐ๐ฏ ๐ต๐ฐ ๐ฅ๐ฆ๐ต๐ข๐ช๐ญ๐ด. ๐๐ฆ ๐ฅ๐ช๐ฅ๐ฏโ๐ต ๐ฏ๐ฐ๐ต๐ฆ ๐ธ๐ฉ๐ช๐ค๐ฉ ๐ธ๐ข๐บ ๐ต๐ฉ๐ฆ ๐ด๐ฉ๐ข๐ฅ๐ฐ๐ธ๐ด ๐ง๐ฆ๐ญ๐ญ. ๐๐ฆ ๐ฅ๐ช๐ฅ๐ฏโ๐ต ๐ณ๐ฆ๐ข๐ญ๐ช๐ด๐ฆ ๐ธ๐ฉ๐ช๐ค๐ฉ ๐ธ๐ข๐บ ๐ต๐ฉ๐ฆ ๐ฉ๐ฐ๐ด๐ต ๐ธ๐ข๐ด ๐จ๐ฐ๐ช๐ฏ๐จ. ๐๐ฆ ๐ฐ๐ฏ๐ญ๐บ ๐ณ๐ฆ๐ท๐ฆ๐ญ๐ญ๐ฆ๐ฅ ๐ช๐ฏ ๐ต๐ฉ๐ฆ ๐ง๐ฐ๐ณ๐ฆ๐ต๐ข๐ด๐ต๐ฆ ๐ฐ๐ง ๐ฉ๐ช๐ด ๐ค๐ณ๐ถ๐ด๐ฉ๐ช๐ฏ๐จ ๐ท๐ช๐ค๐ต๐ฐ๐ณ๐บ. I like your characterisation of Sauron, this version feels very close to the canonical one. The last paragraph was so powerful and is really the culmination of all the efforts of Alatar, Pallando, and the Kuzeen. Will the Ents be re-united with the Ent-wives? I really hope so! Author Reply: Thank you so much! I like a wee joke now and then, and I have presented many to-do lists to my husband over the years, lol. | |