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| The Grief and Guilt of a Ringbearer by Cantora Eledhwen | 2 Review(s) |
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| Marilla | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 11/30/2003 |
| This chapter was good. Not excellent, but good. I think that the word "that" got deleted from the sentence "An aura of peace had passed over the Company, though all had been wary of the mystery [that] surrounded Laurelindorenan, the Valley of the Singing Gold." but I can see how that might've happened accidently. Is Boromir going to be a "main character" (i.e. one whose pov appears frequently)? I like that you're portraying him as a "good guy" who all of the Fellowship seem to like, since that actually makes the most sense, while still acknowledging that he wants the Ring. Putting thoughts in italics was a good idea - it helps to clarify things. My favorite line from this chapter: "'The Valar help him if Pippin thinks he has found someone to answer all of his many questions.' Boromir thought." I like that you've included the Valar, and I like the image of Pippin badgering Haldir (especially movie Haldir) with endless questions. | |
| JULES6 | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 11/30/2003 |
| Hi Cantora, still reading - I always liked the part in the movie where they walk through the forest towards Lothlorien - the colours are very nice. I only wished that Aragorn had found out about Boromir attacking Frodo a little earlier in the movie. Still liking this story and the temptation that is laid out before Boromir. Keep up the good work. JULES | |