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Shadow  by fael bain 1 Review(s)
LynReviewed Chapter: 16 on 3/29/2006
As always, an excellent story.

Just one suggestion:

It was then that she noted that she was a strange cloak wrapped around her.

Missing something...perhaps,

"It was then she noted she had a strange cloak wrapped around her"

or

"It was then she noted a strange cloak was wrapped around her"

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