The Mumak by Armariel
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quodamat
· 24 October 2015
· Chapter 1: The Mûmak
How utterly charming! I think you've perfectly captured the responses of two children who, given their place in society, are quite sophisticated and "worldly" (and therefore not intimidated by all the spectacle or overawed by legendary creatures) but are, after all, still children (and therefore excited out of their minds and not quite willing to admit that they might not be *quite* as adventurous as they'd like to seem). I also love the banter between the siblings: I can definitely imagine having a very similar conversation with my brother when we were kids!
Author's reply
Thanks quodamat! Yes, I'm not entirely sure if they are genuinely concerned for the animal's welfare or just chickening out;) It could be a bit of both. I'm thinking of making a follow-up chapter but not sure yet. Time will tell:)
Thanks for commenting!:):):):)
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PSW
· 24 October 2015
· Chapter 1: The Mûmak
Fun story! I could just see it all -- two excited children each pretending to be braver than the other ... And the little girl so dramatic. :-P
Thanks for writing!
Author's reply
Most welcome, and thanks for commenting! I think this little tale is going to have a follow-up--sequel or second chapter. I was asked to write one and I already feel it forming in my head! :)
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shirebound
· 24 October 2015
· Chapter 1: The Mûmak
This is absolutely delightful. Seeing a legend come to life would be thrilling, but also fill one with awe and respect.
Author's reply
Yes, I should think so! I think a follow-up chapter will be coming soon. Thanks so much for commenting Shirebound! :)
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nancylea57@yahoo.com
· 24 October 2015
· Chapter 1: The Mûmak
Can just see this scene playing out, oh my to see your first
Mumak; and just image visiting the kids that love on top of it!, be still my flutter heart."mom, can we sleep over at the ambassador' s house tonight?"
Author's reply
Yes, seeing a mumak would be all kinds of awesome I should think, especially when you're a kid! And I think there's going to be more, so......... Thanks for commenting Nancylea57, I always value people's feedback! :)
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Larner
· 23 October 2015
· Chapter 1: The Mûmak
A most interesting look at the dynamics between these two royal siblings. Love Luthien's rather romantic turn of mind. Wonder if she got her wish?
Author's reply
Hmmmm....probably. I dare say whatever Luthien wants, Luthien gets, lol...and I'm absolutely sure there's going to be at least one more chapter, by request, so stay tuned! Thanks bunches Larner! Always value your comments! :) :) :)
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UTfrog
· 23 October 2015
· Chapter 1: The Mûmak
Well done story. Please follow up with them riding or at least meeting the beast. Thank you.
Author's reply
I might do that. Thank you! :)
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