CandissD · 3 May 2011 · Chapter 4: How far is our first kiss
another great chapter! can't wait to read more :D
Interrupted Journeys: Part 7 The course of love by elliska
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Fantasia · 1 May 2011 · Chapter 4: How far is our first kiss
Elliska, this is quite a soap opera! how many cross lover are there! Poor Legoals, he won't have a chance to enjoy a first kiss. He will have such a reprimend for his Father, and his guard for leaving without escort that it will be long before he can have a private moment for a kiss.
Author's reply
LOL. A soap opera indeed. And it's not over yet! It will get worse before it gets better (though I doubt Legolas will believe it gets better at all, poor thing). You're certainly right he's not getting that kiss. And he is in a world of trouble for sneaking off to get it in the first place. Poor Legolas! Thanks so much for the reviews! I appreciate them so much!
daw the minstrel · 1 May 2011 · Chapter 4: How far is our first kiss
Then he tensed, held his breath and looked at her closely, praying she would not think him overbold. Apparently she did not. LOLOL. No, she didn't. She was wondering if she was going to have to grab his ears and haul him down to kiss her because otherwise she'd be old before it happened. I liked the way the man's hand shook, telling us that he wasn't comfortable threatening them. And what do you know, it's another young couple doing something their parents wouldn't approve of. Legolas's calm assurance, even when the older man aims at him, speaks well of his courage and his faith in his father's warriors. The tangled affairs of the Laketown couple must really shock Legolas. They're so far from his experience. I was as startled as he was when the warriors looked to him for a decision. What a way to start taking on adult responsibility. And Legolas is sharp enough to understand the lieutenant's desire to help the young couple and use Legolas to do it. Seriously, I think Aewen isn't a good match for a king's son. Poor thing. She's going to take this personally, especially since she just complained that Legolas never had time for her.
Author's reply
She was wondering if she was going to have to grab his ears and haul him down to kiss ROTFL! Hilarious image, that one. I'm tempted to steal it--if it isn't cut, Maidhien is going to give Legolas a bit of a hard time in a later chapter and this sounds more like something she would say than what I have written. Awesome! :-) But Legolas has definitely lost his chance for now, hasn't he? But you're right, Aewen is no match for him, at least not yet. (In fact, again, if it doesn't get cut, Lindomiel is going to make exactly that comment in the last chapter--but fortunately not in Legolas's presence, since he is going to have enough to worry about then, without his mother adding to it). I can't imagine what an elf, with their views on marriage and what constitutes a marriage, might think of the way some marriages must have been arranged in Mannish towns. That would be completely outside of their comprehension. And Legolas, being so obviously innocent about such things, is getting quite an education here. But the father's reaction isn't that far off from Dannenion's, and that will be food for thought for Galithil and Maidhien later. Legolas is definitely learning the down side of authority here though. He has enjoyed the guards treating him in a privileged manner due to who he is for while now (like guards letting him have a horse or letting him into rooms when they would not let his cousins, even Galithil, do the same thing, as in the last story). Now he's seeing some times who he is is difficult/inconvenient too. Reality bites. ;-) Thanks so much for the reviews, daw! I appreciate them so much!
CandissD · 26 April 2011 · Chapter 3: Good choices and not so good ones
Great chapter! Legolas the diplomat! :) I also have a feeling Legolas and Aewen are about to get into trouble! can't wait to read more
Author's reply
Legolas did well with the men, didn't he? ;-) But he will regret his later actions! Thanks so much for the reviews. I really appreciate them!
perelleth · 26 April 2011 · Chapter 3: Good choices and not so good ones
At last, i was able to seat and read and enjoy! It's amusing that legols is suddenly about to turn into rule breaking elfling while Galithil is almost settled... He's found himself a hote headed elleth! That's kind of poetic justice. I liked the moment when they stepped out of the forest into the grasslands, it was a shock to me almost as to them... wonderful touch, that! I'm so nejoying this, elliska, thank you!
Author's reply
Galithil is almost settled, but he will make a decision in the next chapter that is going to force Thranduil into action, which will be fun. Legolas is definitely about to get into a lot of trouble. Teenagers just don't think sometimes, poor kid! I wish I could have spent more time on the grassland moment. That must be incredible when you are used to something so different. Thanks so much for the review! I appreciate them so much!
Fantasia · 25 April 2011 · Chapter 3: Good choices and not so good ones
The encounter with the men went better than I expected...now, going off with Aewen....will see.
Author's reply
Legolas was relieved at how he worked out the problem with the traders. Unfortunately, he will b less pleased with how it works out with Aewen. That will be a little more trouble for him, poor thing! Thanks so much for the review! I really appreciate them!
daw the minstrel · 24 April 2011 · Chapter 3: Good choices and not so good ones
This chapter seemed really well paced. There was time for character stuff, but it moved along and something interesting was happening all the time. I liked the way we find out who originally made the various arguments and then gave up when Galithil and Maidhien ignored them and started on the same discussion again. I understand how that kind of obsessive repetition happens. When something big is on your mind--and her being sent not only away but also to someplace dangerous--is huge. I say again, "poor guards." This is going to be trouble. Legolas was particularly funny when he thought that Eirienil "enjoyed immunity from being punched." LOL. I'm sure she does. And that phrase suggests events in Legolas's life that we haven't seen. As much trouble as Galithil and Maidhien are, Aewen is bigger trouble at the moment! She has no fear, and Legolas is young, male, and in love. This little excursion into the dark would be problematic even if you don't have Bad Events in mind, which I suspect you do. I liked the encounter with the spice merchants for a couple of reasons. The guards gave what I thought was perceptive advice and it clued me in as a reader to where the danger might lie. Then Legolas handled the situation creatively and well despite his surprise at being "Lord Legolas." The argument rang true on all sides. The spice merchant seems to be in all kinds of trouble, poor thing. In the exchange about the axle, Brethil really came alive for me. I liked it that he says he could fix it, it's such a simple job. I could hear his scornful tone, and he convinces me that his confidence is well founded. Also, I liked the awe the children felt at the sight of grasslands. I was waiting for this chapter this evening, and I was well rewarded for my wait!
Author's reply
This was a tough one, because not a lot physically happens, but Legolas's mind is off in a bunch of directions, with the men and Galithil/Maidhien and, most importantly for him, Aewen. I'm glad you liked Legolas's thoughts about Eirienil's 'immunity.' I giggled myself at that. Anastor and Legolas are friends, but Anastor has such a different attitude than Legolas is used to. I can see Anastor reacting with a good punch easily, and I can see him pushing Legolas (or especially Galithil) just a little far to earn himself a punch a few times too. :-) Thranduil will be pleased with how the deal with the merchants turned out, but he is going to be far less pleased with other things. Aewen is leading Legolas into a lot of trouble, for certain. I definitely have Bad Events in mind. ;-) Poor Legolas and poor guards, indeed. And I am so glad you liked Brethil too. I like him as a character and friend for Legolas. He is a good kid and he'll prove it as things go along. I wish Legolas had more time to enjoy the grasslands. That must be incredible, really, when all you've ever seen is the forest. Kind of like seeing the ocean for the first time. Thanks so much for the review, daw! Your comments really made my day, because this was a tough chapter to write.
daw the minstrel · 17 April 2011 · Chapter 2: To kill your joys with love
I've been out of town visiting my son and was excited to find this chapter when I got home. Every section of it has conflict, which I thought was great. Even the bit about the two First-Years getting their just deserts (from Legolas's POV anyway) was fun. Poor Tulus and Colloth. If only orcs were the main threat to their charges! Dannenion doesn't have enough fear or sense to know when he's going too far. I especially liked him going after Thranduil, and the king's threat to removing his hand if Dannenion didn't remove it from from Thranduil's face. Also how weary everyone in that room was when Dannenion showed up. They've heard it all before. Maidhien certainly wasn't intimidated. Thranduil's assessment of her is right, I think. She and Galithil are well matched. The last section suggests that the plot is thickening. So something is "wrong" about this guy searching for his SIL's murderer? And the only men around are the spice merchants? I see trouble!
Author's reply
Every section of it has conflict You made my day with this comment. My little exercise for myself with this story when I went through it to post it was to add/cut/change things and break it up in places to try to keep up-ing the stakes and maintaining the tension better. Yeah, orcs are more pleasant than Dannenion in many ways. At least they have the good sense to fear Thranduil. ;-) Dannenion is going to learn some respect. Not now, maybe, but soon. Thranduil has done this Hallion's way for a long time. His patience is at an end. Maidhien is a strong little girl. She's got what it takes and she'll prove it. I see trouble! Yep! Poor Legolas.
perelleth · 17 April 2011 · Chapter 2: To kill your joys with love
Cyberspace ate down half of my first review... I was saying that it's such fun to see Legolas disgruntled by being requested to do something for his adar, and seeing Galithil as the level-headed one! And a wonderful second chapter. Maidhien really knows how to handle her adar, doesn't she? I'm sure he will have to give up eventually. And poor guards, really!
Author's reply
Ain't computers great! Yes, Galithil is being very mature. He still enjoys a little thrill, but past events have toned down his desire to generate really outrageous ones himself considerably. Maidhien definitely can handle her adar. We will see a lot of that in this story and other ones. Dannenion is not going to win this one. I think being the guards in any of our stories has to be the worst job ever! Thanks so much for the reviews! I appreciate them so much!
CandissD · 17 April 2011 · Chapter 2: To kill your joys with love
another great chapter! Can't wait to read more :)
Author's reply
I'm glad you continue to enjoy! Thanks so much for the reviews!
perelleth · 16 April 2011 · Chapter 1: Flirtations and frustrations
Well at last I had time to sit down and enjoy! Just like the old times! This is promising, elliska, I'm so thrilled! Legolas NOT wanting to go an assignment for his dad
Author's reply
I'm glad you like it so far! Hope you continue to. Yes, Hallion and Thranduil have to be wondering what's up that Legolas isn't as excited as Galithil. Well, they'll find out soon enough. :-) Thanks so much for the review. I appreciate them so much!
ziggy · 15 April 2011 · Chapter 1: Flirtations and frustrations
I only check this site rarely now so I was so delighted to see a new story from you. It flows seamlessly from the last and it felt like I had never been away. Wonderful characterisations and a super plot- I am looking forward to this!
Author's reply
Thanks! I'm so happy you happened to check in and see it. And I hope you enjoy it. Thanks so much for the review! I really appreciate them.
Fantasia · 12 April 2011 · Chapter 1: Flirtations and frustrations
I'm so glad that you have posted! it is like the old times. Poor Legolas and the other boys, why we, females, make their life so miserable? I remember those days, so much flirting and sending mixing signals. I have an older brother and sometimes I have to explain him what the girls really wanted. I'm happy that all the gang is getting close, that is, until their parents start the conspiracy again.
Author's reply
I'm glad you are still reading! I certainly am glad to be back to posting again. Poor boys, indeed. Dating is hard for girls too, of course, but somehow it seems harder for boys. They really do seem clueless trying to figure out how to approach girls. It's fun to watch. ;-) that is, until their parents start the conspiracy again Exactly. Thanks so much for the reviews. I really appreciate them.
CandissD · 10 April 2011 · Chapter 1: Flirtations and frustrations
Great chapter! It's good to read about Legolas and the gang again :)
Author's reply
Thanks! It is good to be back at it. I have quite a bit of time now and I've been having a lot of fun again in Tolkien's world. Hope you continue to enjoy and thanks so much for the review!
Gwynhyffar · 10 April 2011 · Chapter 1: Flirtations and frustrations
I was delighted to see this!!! Alas poor Legolas. He finally gets to be a grown up but it's at completely the wrong time. He has other not-altogether-childish plans. Can't wait to see what's next!
Author's reply
He finally gets to be a grown up but it's at completely the wrong time. Poor thing indeed! I had so much fun writing that. It's so typical. You spend so much time wanting to be 'grown up' and it really isn't all it's cracked up to be when it finally comes at you. And naturally Legolas's plans are not destined to go well. Thanks so much for the review! I really appreciate them!
daw the minstrel · 10 April 2011 · Chapter 1: Flirtations and frustrations
Yay! I can't tell you how happy I was to get the notification for this story. And it's set at such a wonderful time: young people growing up and trying to figure out what it means to care for someone, trying to sort out all those mixed feelings of love, jealousy, sex, and frustration. And also facing up to more grown up duties too, but that's not what's first in Legolas's mind apparently! "Well that serves you right!" Langon's voice boomed from above him True enough. Weapons training isn't a game, and I approve of Langon's attitude even if Legolas and his cousins don't. :-) I like the way Legolas is honest about his distraction, but with Langon watching, I suppose he's learned that honesty is not only the best course, it's the only one. I had to laugh at the kids in the pool with their wet clothes. We're in the boys' POV so we notice only the girls, and it doesn't seem to occur to Legolas that his clothes are wet too. Maidhien on Galithil's lap must be an interesting experience for both of them. And the guards must be torn between amusement and dismay over what they might have to chaperon. Not that they'd interfere, I suppose, that being above their pay grade. Aewen seems full of beans. It sounds like she's about to get her wish to go to the forest's edge. Galithil grinned and nudged Legolas under the table with his foot. He derived a twisted sort of delight at seeing his uncle's temper when it was directed at Men or Dwarves LOL. Oh, Galithil. I guess that's understandable. I look forward to seeing Legolas rise to the occasion. But not without some pain first! Or maybe during. We'll see. Thanks for posting, Elliska. You made my Sunday afternoon.
Author's reply
:-) It really is the perfect age to write about. So much potential for trouble! Weapons training isn't a game, and I approve of Langon's attitude even if Legolas and his cousins don't. Definitely. Of course, Langon is the one that Dolgailon would not promote to captain because even he is afraid of him, so... ;-) Poor Legolas. He really does need to pay attention though. Pity he won't. We're in the boys' POV so we notice only the girls, and it doesn't seem to occur to Legolas that his clothes are wet too. I had to laugh at this because it is so true. As is the part about Galithil and Maidhien! You have to feel sorry for the guards. Who would want to watch kids in their courtship rituals. That was bad enough to do yourself. To have to watch it! ;-) Things go downhill for Legolas pretty steadily in this, poor thing. It's a hard age. :-) Thanks so much for the review, daw! I really appreciate them.