Reviews (37)

Viresse · 27 January 2009 · Chapter 2: Of Flames and Flight

Really love those conversations between the twins, especially ¡§I¡¦ve been thinking,¡¨...¡§Never a good sign.¡¨ Hope to see more Elladan in this story. Would his "clear" mind helped the whole situation? ...or worse?? Please update soon.

Agape4Gondor · 26 January 2009 · Chapter 2: Of Flames and Flight

Wow - excellent chapter again. Once I saw this posted, I had to stop and read, though it is quite late at night here. Cannot spend the time reviewing as I would like... but this was an excellent chapter. I loved Gilraen's opposition - seemed only right - and who would ever have thought that the 'end' would occur so quickly. Do so wish the twins had stuck a little closer to the town.... Already death flows through the North. Again - great chapter. Can't wait for more!

Linda Hoyland · 26 January 2009 · Chapter 2: Of Flames and Flight

A gripping chapter with lots of unexpected twists and turns. I found your scenario all too plausible.Poor Gilraen! By the way,hickory is not found in Europe,oak would be the most likely wood to make furniture from.

curiouswombat · 26 January 2009 · Chapter 2: Of Flames and Flight

This is simply a note to say how much I am enjoying this story. I can feel and hear the Dunedain village, relate to Gilraen's sorrows and fears, and weep for poor Halpharn. Beautifully written, thank you.

Elflingimp · 26 January 2009 · Chapter 2: Of Flames and Flight

Ah! I'll review, it was great!!!! I felt like I was right there with them(Glad I wasn't)lots a action, now I just want more! Please? Hugs The Imp

Cairistiona · 25 January 2009 · Chapter 1: To Slay a Legend

First off, my bad for missing entirely the bit about chieftains and fostering. *slapping hand* Bad beta! But you cover your bases nicely with the note, and as far as I'm concerned, rearranging a detail here or there is no problem. I really enjoyed this first chapter--I find the idea of an assassin killing Arathorn very intriguing and it's of course possible, since all we know is that Arathorn was shot in the eye during an orc attack. Open field otherwise. Herumor is a very chilling and intriguing character. And of all the lovely imagery that you always have in your story, I think the line that most makes me smile in this chapter is: "Now he couldn’t sit up; she was smooshing the blankets together." I love that word, smooshing! Very much a 2 y/o's language, that.

inzilbeth · 24 January 2009 · Chapter 1: To Slay a Legend

A terrific opening chapter, well done. I particularly enjoyed that you included Ivorwen in this as we see her so rarely. And I'm very glad you put that note at the end as I was wondering why everyone was making such a fuss over something they had been doing for a thousand years! I'm looking forward to more.

Ainariel · 23 January 2009 · Chapter 1: To Slay a Legend

I must say, I love this one, too. You have an ability to draw your readers right into your tale(s). I think my favorite line was: "As her hands closed on the damp wool and cool metal underneath, the slow breaking in her chest climaxed in a wracking wave of agony and the wreckage was complete." That one sentance is charged with the finality of what has happened, and describes so well the emotional maelstrom that comes with the realization. Powerful! At one time I would have agreed with the previous review that Aragorn's thoughts seem very mature for his age, but now - I am the 'Auntie' of 2 precocious little girls who just turned 2 and 4, respectively. Both could count to 15, knew their ABC's, could name their colors,and were speaking in complete sentences by the age of 2. They were also adamant about being "big girls" and not "little babies" anymore...so while he may be a bit mature, I don't think your Aragorn is too far off...particularly (as was also mentioned in the previous review) if he is a gifted/bright child. Another well-told story - I look forward to the updates!

Envinyatar · 23 January 2009 · Chapter 1: To Slay a Legend

Loved this, especially the characterisation of Gilraen. Good to see her as a strong figure, she often seems to be portrayed as having little part in the decision to take Aragorn to Rivendell. Both the ambush and the description of the village were very convincing and I'm intrigued by all your original characters, both good and evil! One small thing - I thought Aragorn's thoughts seemed quite mature for a 2-year-old, but they worked well within the context of the story and I guess you could argue that Dunedain children would be more mature than us lesser mortals! Looking forward very much to reading more.

Raksha The Demon · 22 January 2009 · Chapter 1: To Slay a Legend

Well-written chapter. Of course I'd like to know who the Eebil Herumor is. Good characterisation of Gilraen and Ivorwen. What a storm to erupt over the newly fatherless little Aragorn; and poor Gilraen will have to be the one to put it out...

Linda Hoyland · 22 January 2009 · Chapter 1: To Slay a Legend

This is just heartrending.It does seem plausible that Arathorn might have been singled out.I love the way you portray Gilraen and young Aragorn. Minor concrit, "cabins" sounds rather North American for M-e and I doubt Ivorwen would appear that old as she is of a long lived race and her daughter is only in her twenties. I would suggest older woman or middle aged wooman. This is a well told tale and I'm looking forward to more.

Agape4Gondor · 22 January 2009 · Chapter 1: To Slay a Legend

I absolutely loved the ambush! Sorry Arathorn! But it was quite well written - even though I knew this was about Arathorn - when I saw the arrow hit the eye - it became real, if you know what I mean. Excellent first part. I also loved the acoutrements about Arathorn's 'hall' - it had not occurred to me - but I think that you are correct in the fact that he would have a few articles to remember his kingdoms 'place' in Middle-earth. The description of the village was quite nice too. Well thought out. 'She could only guess that pity had moved the Valar to blind her eyes for a few moments longer' - loved this line and this thought, for I got chills when I read the first lines of the patrol as it came into view.... Oh my! Your description of her chaotic, hope-filled thoughts were too real. I lost someone violently, unexpectedly, and all these kinds of thoughts flooded my mind as I drove home upon the horrid news...... *sadly weeps* (well done indeed - I hope this was not written from your own experience.) Loved the 'discussion' about Aragorn's future and loved Gilraen's mom! Very nicely written tale - glad you 'qualified' the 'tradition.'