Shadow by fael bain
Elvenesse · 5 September 2003 · Chapter 4: IV
Wow! Another chapter already, and a nice introduction to the evil entity. Could you just clarify who it was that knew the game was up, Legolas or (I'm assuming) one of his friends?
Author's reply
Hehhee, you've gotta read somemore if you want to find out! ;) Thanks again for the review!
Elvenesse · 5 September 2003 · Chapter 3: III
I have a few small quibbles, in the prologue I think you said Second Age, when you *probably* meant Third and at one stage, you referred to Legolas as the fair prince, it just jars somehow. Also, I don't know whether his friends would stalk him, trying to hit him. I know it's improbable, but there is a chance that they could kill their Crown Prince. Apart from that I think that this is a promising story, I like seeing how they would deal with the encroaching evil and describing Legolas’ relationship with is father as distant is fine.
Author's reply
Oops thanks for correcting the errors, Elvenesse! I'm glad you like it!