Mairi · 8 August 2007 · Chapter 1
Very nice. When Pippin and the others are talking, it actually sounds like hobbits talking, which I know I would have difficulty doing. However, I have to say it would be nice if you made some of the longer paragraphs into two.
Author's reply
Thank you, Mairi. Dialogue can be difficult, that's for sure. I appreciate your comments. Thanks for reading!