perelleth
· 25 June 2007
· Chapter 8: Witness To Another Possibility
Mmm. I liked your reasonig here, that they had not thought what would be done after the SIlmarils were regained, because it gives a certain measure of redemption to MAglor, that he cast it away on his own will nad not of unbearable torment. And I loved the lasst scene, he saying goodbye to his people and walking away, while the othres understood that they had to let him go. Nice tale. I hope that the muse keeps blowing in ths quarter!
JastaElf
· 13 June 2007
· Chapter 8: Witness To Another Possibility
Absolutely stunningly gorgeous... such sorrow, such grandeur, such pain... such beauty in little stolen moments in a horrible, wonderful life...
Thank you SO much for sharing this with us! It is wonderful!
elliska
· 12 June 2007
· Chapter 8: Witness To Another Possibility
A memory stirred in his mind, of holding his father’s body as it burned away from within. Great connection here. I also loved Maglor's last words to the Silmaril. Very powerful and they sum it up perfectly.
This was a great ending to a very tragic story. Great job, FP!
Larner
· 12 June 2007
· Chapter 8: Witness To Another Possibility
Again, this is one who learned the hard way how the love and vow he gave his father twisted so much of his life and reality from what was intended. I've grieved for him and how he was robbed of all in the end save for his singing.
MithLuin
· 12 June 2007
· Chapter 8: Witness To Another Possibility
Such a pity that this was the one vow he could keep, in the end. I think he would have chosen to keep most of the others over this one (certainly the promises to his wife and adopted sons). Beautifully told, though of course tragic. I look forward to your next tale!
Agape4Gondor
· 12 June 2007
· Chapter 8: Witness To Another Possibility
I feel so privileged to have been able to take this gift of yours and enjoy it. Nay, not only enjoy, but relish, revel in, rejoice, and grieve. Beautifully written - as you said, the form made it easier for the reader also. I hope to read your other 'Maglor' tales.
Thank you for sharing this wondrous gift.
daw the minstrel
· 12 June 2007
· Chapter 8: Witness To Another Possibility
I really like the way this story rounds out and forms a whole, Pony. Maglor comes across as a tragic figure. That moment when he says he's lost everything he ever loved except one brother is touching.
perelleth
· 10 June 2007
· Chapter 7: Not The Only Way To Go
A tragic moment for Maglor...and for the two elflings as well, since for the second time they are separated from those who cared for them... But the tragic doom that the feanorians cast upon themselves would not allow them lasting peace and happiness, and the elflings were better off away from him, as MAglor will surely understand.
perelleth
· 8 June 2007
· Chapter 6: The Country Of The Heart
Ah, this makes me thing of that chapter when MAglor says tat he wanted to be a father! Now thrpugh blood and blade, there he is, a father indeed, and the beginning of a wonderful friendship!
perelleth
· 8 June 2007
· Chapter 5: With Awful Glories Crowned
Well, if you put it htat way it was a terrible sucession of events fro mAcalaure, and now he nds up being king while he doesn´t know whether his brother lives or not. You have a way of showing the family side of every event that it makes me chuckle, as I were seeing them in slippers, after the day´s chapter is done. THe vengeful sons´of FEanor singing that song together has something of those moments of unexpected, unplanned silliness (in a good sense)into which we all indulge from time to time.
perelleth
· 8 June 2007
· Chapter 4: The Scarlet Tide
Yep, confusion and darkness reinforcing each other. What a moment for the Noldor!
perelleth
· 8 June 2007
· Chapter 3: Nightfall
I am finally here... Good job from light and routine light to an unusual darkness and the second death in Aman...what a shock to the family...a prelude for the changes that will come unstoppble now!
Larner
· 6 June 2007
· Chapter 7: Not The Only Way To Go
Maedhros in his way was as destructive as his father, if perhaps more humane about it. And he sees Maglor one step closer to his final doom of isolation and eternal banishment from all that had ever been dear to him.
Larner
· 6 June 2007
· Chapter 6: The Country Of The Heart
A wonderful beginning for the family, after all. And love the descriptions of the farm and their reactions to it.
And I rejoice the agreement has been made to cease hostilities for a time. These two need that.
Agape4Gondor
· 5 June 2007
· Chapter 7: Not The Only Way To Go
I loved how you began this chapter. I had to do a double-take - just such love and joy in Maglor's house - took my breath away.
But then - the coming of Maedhros is like the coming of doom. Well written. "his laugh a little to hearty, smile a little too broad. Somehow reminds me of Saruman.
The horror of the words - too difficult even for an adult to fathom or swallow, let alone boys barely grown.
How does one go on in life when blow after blow befalls your heart, your mind, your soul. What Elros and Elrond survived was unimaginable, but what Maglor must survive is even worse.
I read this at work and had to blink way too many times to still the tears. Beautifully written chapter.
elliska
· 5 June 2007
· Chapter 7: Not The Only Way To Go
This was the broken vow that is the saddest to me. As you showed, Tolkien says somewhere (can't remember immediately) Elrond loved Maglor. To have to give them up and go for something he had no further interest in, after everything else he lost, has always made him a tragic figure to me. This chapter was powerfully sad.
Raksha The Demon
· 5 June 2007
· Chapter 7: Not The Only Way To Go
Oh, this is gut-wrenching. Poor Maglor; and the kids; their little family wrenched apart for the second time. I think Maedhros could have waited; he didn't really need Maglor to go after the Silmarils; in a few years Elrond and Elros would have probably wanted to seek out Gil-galad on their own, which would have been far easier on the boys and Maglor...
Beautifully written, especially Maedhros offering Maglor a Silmaril of his own - to Maglor, the sons of Earendil were his jewels; and no Silmaril can replace them.
daw the minstrel
· 5 June 2007
· Chapter 7: Not The Only Way To Go
Oh dear. This was heartbreaking. It really was like the parting of children and a parent. The scene with Gil-galad was cool though. I liked the picture of his campsite and his ranged warriors and he himself.
elliska
· 3 June 2007
· Chapter 6: The Country Of The Heart
Catching up again... I love Maglor with Elrond and Elros. Their interactions are exactly what I pictured. I always thought this part of Maglor's history was the saddest. His actions in taking in Elrond and Elros showed that his heart was not at all in the quest for the Silmarils any longer. And clearly he was a good guardian for them given how they turned out (and you did a great job showing that here). That makes his future all the more sad. This was a great chapter!
Agape4Gondor
· 3 June 2007
· Chapter 6: The Country Of The Heart
Another heart-breaking chapter - I particularly liked the beginning paragraphs - especially Maedhros pain.
It is interesting to see Elros and Elrond - especially in this setting.
Am looking forward to the next chapter.
Bodkin
· 2 June 2007
· Chapter 6: The Country Of The Heart
A Good Thing for the whole of Middle-earth that Maglor took Earendil's children to his heart - and this his brother loved him enough to let him have his way.
Oh dear. More oaths. But for a better cause this time. All three of these poor lost people need someone to trust and look after.
Blooming Feanor - destroyer of his own family and of many others.
daw the minstrel
· 29 May 2007
· Chapter 6: The Country Of The Heart
I'd never noticed the symmetry of Elrond and Elros being taken in just as Amrod and Amras die. Tolkien was good at that sort of thing, leaving it understated but suggestive. I suppose he may not even have been consciously aware of it sometimes.
Someday, we will recover Father’s jewels
I think I've had a little too much caffeine because suddenly I'm reading the Silm as a story about castration fears. :-)
elliska
· 28 May 2007
· Chapter 5: With Awful Glories Crowned
Just getting time for reading...
Holy Cow! The battle between Feanor and the balrogs was really well done and his death! Everytime I read how he spent his last moments in this world all I can think is how tragic and what a waste. That must have been a difficult scene to write and you did a great job with it. The whole of this chapter must have been difficult to write--so heavy with grief. The ending, therefore, was perfect. The song was perfect there--an attempt at normality, hope, lightness. It was the saddest part of all to me, really. Great chapter.
Agape4Gondor
· 23 May 2007
· Chapter 5: With Awful Glories Crowned
I was able to print out these first five chapters and read them all last night. I had wondered how far into his life you were going to take this and felt horrid when I realized you were going to take your readers through the curse and the oath... not happy about that - but so well written that I must continue to read - IMHO this is the blackest spot in Elvish history!
Bodkin
· 23 May 2007
· Chapter 5: With Awful Glories Crowned
Feanor - such a selfish ... person. Maedhros - what a mug. Maglor - yet more being dumped on him. They are all in such a trap, with nowhere to go but down.