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shirebound · 14 November 2005 · Chapter 8: The Archer's Homecoming

Pippin's mouth trembled, and if Merry had been a different sort of older cousin he might have laughed at this sudden rush of tender feeling toward a scrap of painted iron. "There, there, Pip, it's all right. He's not lost or sad, just tired because he's been walking a long way." He took Pippin's hand and they slid off the bed together. "See, we'll put him here on the night-table and pretend he's already got home from Norbury. Just a few miles more and he'll be there at his own smial, and the kettle will be singing and his place made ready, and everyone he cares about will be waiting. This is absolutely wonderful! And the last paragraph made me all weepy -- in a good way.

Dreamflower · 14 November 2005 · Chapter 8: The Archer's Homecoming

"I imagine he is," Merry said. "I'm sure he would rather be warm and safe and sitting down to a good meal than going off to war." Merry's stomach growled and he glanced at the clock. "Come along, Pip, are we going to make them fight or not?" "No," Pippin said. "He doesn't want to fight anymore. I think he's cold and frightened. And lost." Pippin's mouth trembled, and if Merry had been a different sort of older cousin he might have laughed at this sudden rush of tender feeling toward a scrap of painted iron. "There, there, Pip, it's all right. He's not lost or sad, just tired because he's been walking a long way." He took Pippin's hand and they slid off the bed together. You have so much in this little scrap of a vignette: references to past history; a beautiful snapshot of Merry's and Pippin's relationship, as shown in the wonderful snippet above; a bit of foreshadowing of the Quest; a lovely tribute to the ones who went off and never returned; and a new and happy ending for them at the hands of a large-hearted hobbit lad. How can you pack so much into such a tiny scene?

Anso the Hobbit · 31 October 2005 · Chapter 7: Three Hobbits and a Little Spellcheck

Hahaha! Oh my! That was one of the most hilarious things I have read in some time. LOL! :D If they hadn't come out of there as quick as they did dire consequences could have been the result.

Larner · 26 October 2005 · Chapter 7: Three Hobbits and a Little Spellcheck

Hilarious. Although Peregrin might have just changed into a small falcon instead of a girl. But do go to FFN and check out Lindelea's wonderful tale of the Hobbits eating muddlewort in which they begin spouting bits of ad jingles and singing "A Hundred Bottles of Beer on the Wall" and so on. Can't remember the title.

Larner · 26 October 2005 · Chapter 6: A Moment of Desperation

The fear for ones kin and favorite younger cousin-brother came across well here.

Dreamflower · 24 October 2005 · Chapter 7: Three Hobbits and a Little Spellcheck

*ROTFLMBO!*howls*wipes eyes* This is just too true to not be hilarious! Speaking as one who is constantly waging war on her spellchecker, which will constantly take the extra "l" out of Travellers or the extra "g" out of waggon, not to mention turning "hobbits" into "habits" or "tourneying" into "journeying", I most certainly appreciate the dire peril the lads were in until they could escape!

Lindelea · 24 October 2005 · Chapter 7: Three Hobbits and a Little Spellcheck

*snork* “Scratch his eyes out later! Let’s make a run for it now, quick!” I love your sense of timing. Ah, yes, that ever-helpful spellchecker, that chokes on "Ernil i Pheriannath" among other things. (BTW, in the same paragraph, I think you have "would have went" when you meant "would have gone")

Anso the Hobbit · 23 October 2005 · Chapter 6: A Moment of Desperation

Oh, that was powerful! Poor Merry, worrying and blaming himself.

Lindelea · 22 October 2005 · Chapter 5: Stone

Yes, even without your author's note I realise that Gimli is working on his own tomb. Somehow this little piece brought an ache to my throat and tears to my eyes. You have captured Gimli's voice so well, and shown how much he has grown over his long/relatively short life. Thanks.

Lindelea · 22 October 2005 · Chapter 6: A Moment of Desperation

O yes, nicely done. Absolutely heart-rending. The desperation-laced interior monologue... And this: but I'll perish here with Boromir if it means you might escape Yes, I can see Merry saying that. And more? Is that a promise?

Armariel · 22 October 2005 · Chapter 6: A Moment of Desperation

Beautiful--spare, economical yet emotionally very gripping.

eiluj · 17 October 2005 · Chapter 5: Stone

How wonderfully you have captured Gimli's voice!

Larner · 4 October 2005 · Chapter 5: Stone

I'd figured that Gimli was doing his own tomb from the monologue, and I love the voice you've given the old dear. Lovely, lovely, well done.

harrowcat · 3 October 2005 · Chapter 5: Stone

A lovely monologue Citrine it made me cry.

Baggins Babe · 3 October 2005 · Chapter 5: Stone

This was beautiful, and so typical of Gimli, even down to asking for a cloth because the dust was making hia eyes water - when we know he was shedding tears at the thought of Legolas being left alone. One can leave the Shire, but it never entirely leaves us, and that is not a bad thing, no, not at all. It is a kindly memory that warms our old bones. So true - I guess the Shire never really leaves us.

Dreamflower · 3 October 2005 · Chapter 5: Stone

This is absolutely stunning. Yes, I can imagine Gimli talking just this way to Gandalf as his time draws near (and he would still call him Gandalf, in his stubborn Dwarvish way, and not Mithrandir or Olorin, LOL!) I loved all you had him saying, but most especially what he said about the hobbits and the Shire. And this: One can leave the Shire, but it never entirely leaves us, and that is not a bad thing, no, not at all. And isn't that so very true of *us*? Or why else would we be doing this?

Jay of Lasgalen · 30 September 2005 · Chapter 4: On Ravenhill

It's great to see this scene from Legolas's POV. I agree that he must have been at the battle, fighting at his father's side, and saddened by the death toll. I love the last line - I can quite believe that Legolas was the one to find Bilbo! Jay

Larner · 30 September 2005 · Chapter 4: On Ravenhill

Yes, I would have loved it had Legolas been the one to find Bilbo there. Nice, appropriate bending of canon there.

Dreamflower · 30 September 2005 · Chapter 4: On Ravenhill

I think you can be forgiven for this teensy little alteration. It's not like you had *Arwen* be the one to find him, is it, LOL? Really, this was nice; I caught Legolas' after battle weariness and melancholy very well, and I can just see his joy at finding Mithrandir's "little" friend".

Jay of Lasgalen · 24 September 2005 · Chapter 3: River and Willow

Poor, innocent Sméagol, so upset about his missing cousin - but Granny suspects the truth. (Is this the grandmother he taught to suck eggses?) Love the ending with Sméagol smiling in his sleep - very chilling.

harrowcat · 24 September 2005 · Chapter 3: River and Willow

Oh creepy, Citrine, very creepy. And they do say love is blind!

Larner · 23 September 2005 · Chapter 3: River and Willow

Ooh, very, very well done. At first he's a lost lamb, yet to prove the sneak, thief, spy, and at last accepted as murderer. Well done indeed.

Dreamflower · 20 September 2005 · Chapter 1: Ale and Conversation

*snicker* That’s too funny. Of course, as in their cups as Merry and Pip were, they won’t even *remember* their attempt at conversation the next day. I also love Frodo, the patient and amused older cousin, with a good deal of practice at dealing with inebriated cousins. A nice change from frail, glum post-Quest Frodo.

harrowcat · 15 September 2005 · Chapter 2: The Dwarf's Conundrum

Aw both these are wonderful Citrine. *echoes of silly grin on face as I go to work!*

Tigger · 8 September 2005 · Chapter 1: Ale and Conversation

Oh yes...Plenty of rabid plotbunnies over there. Evil place it is. Evil, evil, evil. ;oD This was wonderful!!! Poor Merry and Pip...Couldn't help but think of Captain Jack when Merry looked in his ale mug and asked where his ale was. But why is the ale gone? Hee!! Wonderful, wonderful story!!