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Alice · 9 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

It was really nice having a new Daw story waiting for me when I got home. I had a trying day and this vastly improved it. I burst into a grin when I read the summary thinking, " Yay! Ithilden and Alfirin romance stuff!" They're both so adorable. I really enjoyed the scene with Tonduil. Tonduil is nice. I found it amusing to listen to him and Legolas discuss their siblings' romance. I wonder if Ithilden did overhear that bit of the conversation.(grins) I look forward to watching Ithilden and Alfirin finally make some progress. I'm enjoying the teenage elves also. I like Tonduil and it really is good that the training masters convince him to seek another career later. Galelas really was annoying when he was young. I'd forgotten how much so. I have to admit though, I can understand being irritated about Legolas missing classes without knowing the full story. I loved seeing Beliniel. Annael's in love! Well, maybe not yet, but it's just so much fun watching him with his future wife. Annael and Beliniel sitting in a tree . . . Okay, I'm done now. Have I mentioned how much I like Elowen? She mothers all three of them really. She is just such a nice person. I'm really fond of the entire Annael family actually. All three of them are really shiny. I look forward to the next chapter greatly. Are we going to see Ithilden embarass himself at dinner? The answer to that is probably yes. I have this image of Eilian(because he's probably the only one who would dare tease the Commander about something like this to his face) saying to Ithilden " Ah, the path of true love never did run smooth." And Ithilden, soaking wet, or wearing singed clothes, or marked by some sort of sign of calamity just going, " Shut up or I'll demote you." Fortunately for Ithilden if a catastrophe does happen, Eilian is not there to make smart remarks.

Dot · 9 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

Right, I’m back. I think I got a bit over-excited earlier – sorry about that! I really do love a lot about ‘See the Stars’. There’s a wonderful sense of what it was like to live around Thranduil’s stronghold and of their daily lives. The whole place felt really vibrant. I agree with you about Legolas and Thranduil – their relationship is captured perfectly in it. And yes, that flashback to just after Lorellin’s death is amazing. I wouldn’t worry about Ithilden’s characterisation in it. He’s a little more… relaxed and cheery, I suppose, than in stories written later but I like that side of him. Plus it’s largely from Eilian’s POV if I remember correctly, which is going to put a certain spin on things. I always thought there were some fantastic Eilian/Ithilden moments. Often their interactions are restricted to Ithilden’s office or awkward conversations at the table but in that story they’re just *brothers*, you know? Oh, and I think that’s the story that has one of the funniest lines ever… something like “So you escaped the spiders again. You must have run very fast.” That still makes me laugh! But anyway, enough rambling and back to the story I’m supposed to be reviewing! I felt so bad for Tonduil. He’s such a really likeable character and I hate to see him struggle. It’s just not in his nature to be a warrior. But at least he does realise that eventually. And Galelas is such a pain in the you-know-what. I have to keep reminding myself that he improves with time and a little help from Eilian. And poor Legolas! I know he still has problems with knife-work in ‘Prodigal Sons’ but it seems it stretches to the sword as well. My heart goes out to him. I can’t even begin to imagine how horrific it was to him to kill another elf and to be still plagued by such vivid nightmares is just awful. He was always so calm and self-assured when it came to weapons training but self-doubt appears to have crept in now and that must be so difficult to handle. And the thing is, this is his life, not just some hobby. He has to do this. He seems to work himself into a bit of a state but I suppose he just needs time. Everyone can tell him that he did the right thing but he really needs to come to that conclusion himself. Thelion is obviously trying to treat him no differently from the others. The possibility that he genuinely isn’t having any negative thoughts about him doesn’t seem to have dawned on Legolas at all. I’m glad he did well today too, although I imagine it’ll be harder when he actually has to spar with someone. A lot might depend on who he’s partnered with. And I’m just going to believe you when you say that elbow thing makes a difference!! Good old Annael! He certainly must have wondered about Legolas and it takes a lot not to ask. He’s such a good friend. I love the bit with Annael, Tonduil and Legolas joking together. I wonder if Ithilden and Alfirin know how much amusement their younger brothers get from them?! Tonduil’s become a little braver if he’s criticising Galelas in front of the scary troop commander! Alfirin is right that Galelas has “reasons” for his behaviour, although if I had to spend time with him I wouldn’t be too willing to see them either. She’s still “my lord”ing Ithilden – I hope that’s just in public! Actually, she might be a good person for Legolas to talk to because she’s been in a similar situation, but as the hostage, wasn’t she? At the moment, though, anyone wanting to discuss the matter with Legolas would want to tread very carefully. So Legolas’ family have gone into protective mode? I can’t say I blame them, even though it’s probably just making Legolas paranoid. He is judging others as well as himself but at least he recognises it to some extent. I tend not to talk about things either so I can totally see where he’s coming from. LOL at Legolas imitating Thranduil! I loved that moment where they both laugh. He has a point, though – if Ithilden is entitled to keep some things private, then surely he is as well. I do love to see Ithilden all embarrassed! But I’m looking forward to some progress between him and Alfirin. They’re so perfect for one another. PLEASE tell me you’ll show us the dinner scene!! Thranduil must be having such a hard time. It must be really frustrating to see your child suffering but to find yourself shut out. It’s always difficult to see that someone needs help and want to give it but to know that there’s simply nothing you can do but be there and wait until they’re ready. And Legolas is no longer a child so he certainly can’t press the issue. Is that Alfirin’s mother he talks to or a different healer? Oh, lord. Turgon’s back. So he really has been riding out on patrol. I never believed that actually did happen! I suppose Elowen knew that Legolas wasn’t at training as well. I really liked that moment when she ruffles Turgon’s hair. She’s often been affectionate with Legolas but I don’t think I’ve seen it with Turgon. It’s lovely to know that he has that. “I, for one, am glad you are back safely and hope you do not intend to do anything so dangerous again until you are a few years older.” :-( I’d love to know how Annael and his family react when Turgon dies. I’d imagine Elowen and Siondel would become very protective, even though they know Annael is sensible. “For a second, Legolas wondered if having Alfirin in his family would be like having Elowen.” Crikey, it must be so odd to have a female presence in the house again. And while the rest of his family remember what that was like, Legolas has never really known it. I can certainly see a comparison between Alfirin and Elowen. They’re both very motherly and have a lot of love to give. Beliniel is friends with Miriwen too? I suppose all the maidens around the same age would be friendly with each other. Annael and Legolas are just too cute. And I thought Ithilden was awkward! Of course, Legolas is still young… Oh, sudden thought – who was Ithilden’s first kiss?? Turgon hasn’t become aware of the charms of the maidens yet, eh? They’re all at that age where they grow up in different ways and at different rates. I’m feeling sad now that he’ll never get to experience that. I normally don’t think about his future when I read about Turgon but this story is just far too close to the next one not to. Ah well. Oh, I’m finished. Well, this was certainly a great start! Hopefully I’ll be busy with the EE DVD at the weekend but I’ll be dying for an update of this too!! Thank you so much, daw – you’ve made me really happy today! :-)

Karri · 9 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

This looks to be an interesting story. Poor Legolas could do with some proper post-traumatic stress therapy, couldn't he. I am glad you have been aboe to make some progress on this. Very good! :-)

sofia · 9 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

Good first chapter. Can't wait to read more. Thranduil must feel so helpless while his youngest son is suffering. -sofia

esamen · 9 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

Oh, a new Daw! (Reads with happy anticipation.) Mmm, mmm, mmm. This is one fabulous Christmas present for me, because: -- My hero is finally getting a little attention. I just love Legolas h/c, even more than Eilian h/c. Love it! Thank you, thank you! Pour it on! -- Beautifully crafted scenes. Physical sparring, and then a bit of verbal sparring between brothers, too? Nice touch. I love the multifaceted way that you tell a story. So much to see, hear, smell, touch, and think about. It is truly enthralling. -- And a little romance too. I enjoy romance, especially in the subtle, pointy, nuanced way that you render it. It is still true that most of the excitement lies in the chase. That's something that the post-1960s generations are missing out on--anticipation. I like it that Ithilden, with all his many powers, must still travel this road like any other ordinary guy. (Man? Male? Elf?) It's always a wonderful moment in anyone's life. Delightful! Can't wait for more! Happy typing! Esamen

lwarren · 9 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

Yay!! A new story by daw! I sure was glad to see this...was able to put off grading some tests this morning for a bit...would much rather read an elf story by you! LOL I am glad you went back to this time frame, daw. I wondered how much time and effort it might take a young Legolas to get over killing an elf-maid (even if it was to protect his father and realm, and the other elf woman)at the end of that story. Legolas would be the type to really see it as a "kinslaying", which would cause some very big emotional problems for him, as his Father is even now noticing in this first chapter. Picking up a sharpened sword and swinging it, even at a stick, would be hard, what with the flashbacks he seems to be experiencing. I'm glad he has Annael and later, good ole' Turgon to reinforce the normality of everything. However, I really wanted to shove Galelas' foot in his...ear. What a jerk! I held my breath, I thought he might push until Legolas exploded or something. Annael's mom seemed to know something...I really like her (I remember the story of Legolas' fascination with Annael's mother when he was small). Maybe she'll be a big help to him. Great start...can't wait to see how he deals with the pain of all this. (Ah, yes, Ithilden and Alfirin'g courtship continues...dinner with the family...must be on our best behavior and use company manners!!! LOL) linda

Dot · 9 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

I'm just dropping by before lunchtime ends, even though I won't be able to write a proper review until I get home in another few hours... I can't stop grinning! There's some REALLY great stuff in 'See the Stars' and I'm so, so glad that you went back to this time!! And yay, more Ithilden!!! Right...work...I'll be back later! :-) (Yay again!)

thechevin · 9 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

What a lovely pre holiday gift a new story I remember the original story really well and so enjoyed it even back then before I was brave enough to leave reviews so I am eagerly looking forward to seeing how Legolas comes to terms with his feelings as well as Thranduil and Ithilden as well of course Not only that but a little more romance for Ithilden I do hope the course of true love runs a little more smoothly for him (what am I saying of course I don't it is good to see the so assured Ithilden floundering a little) Poor Legolas must feel as if he is in a goldfish bowl with all these people watching him or atleast he thinks they are and why do I get the feeling that Turgon and the others will eventually find out the reason for Legolas' absence and that it will not help thank you Judy

elliska · 9 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

Oh I am dying. Of course I knew you'd write one over winter break but this is too good and I am going out of town Monday and I won't have Internet access again until after the New Year. I am going to be dying in suspense to know how this works out. This is a really interesting time period in your history of the family. I often wondered how Legolas came through such a tramatic event. I'll have to go back and reread the two stories that sandwich this one just to have them fresh. You really packed this chapter full of priceless moments though. I love Legolas' asking Ithilden if Alfirin is finally taking him seriously (impertinent question!) and then raising his eyebrow to Ithilden's response in deliberate imitation of Thranduil. Burst out laughing at the little brat. Great. And poor Thranduil. I am not a parent but I can't imagine what it would be like when your kids reach that age when they won't accept your help anymore. I remember the hurt look on my dad's face a few times. And I never killed anyone. Thranduil must be beside himself. When Turgon showed up...oh goodness. Nothing good can happen in this story, especially with him boasting, in this of all times, about riding with patrols. I seem to recall it will not be long until exactly that over confidence leads him to his final disaster. And Miriwen makes an appearance. I remember reading in a review that you said reviewers hate Legolas' girlfriends. I always liked her (she is the one he kisses at Ithilden's wedding, isn't she? I think I'll go back and read that again too). I hope she has a role in this story. But it was the details in this chapter that made it great--the curtailing of First Age lessons, the little things Elowen does (mussing hair, pausing to listen to Legolas' reaction), Legolas' various reactions to Miriwen, his wondering if Ithilden kissed Alfirin. Those actions all add such depth and in some cases have so much weight given past or future events. (Don't I remember when Legolas has his first kiss that he benefit's from Ithilden's 'indiscretions' kissing Alfirin? I think that's right. I hope we get a glimpse of that--it's cute) Great job on weaving that in. I'm not sure if I should hope for one more chapter between now and Monday or not (I know you'll post one). It will probably just leave me dying with curiousity. So glad to see a new story though!

Bodkin · 9 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

Perhaps what's-her-name wasn't an elf - she was an undercover orc, of a kind bred by Sauron to fit unobtrusively into elven society as spies. Maybe Alfirin will be the one to get through to Legolas here - after all, that man tried to kill her, so she's been the hostage in one of these situations. Or Annael - who knows better than to ask, but whose understanding and acceptance could soothe Legolas more than most things.

Brazgirl · 9 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

Oh, it's always great to read from you again! Nice start! I guess I will have to read the other story now. Poor Legolas he is suffering so much. The way you describe it is great. I love when Legolas thinks about Ithilden... if he kissed the maiden!!!

Jay of Lasgalen · 9 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

Ai, poor Legolas! It's been a long time since I read See The Stars, but I remember how terrible he felt after killing the spy. I'll have to go back and read it again! He seems to be getting better, as the title suggests, but he needs to talk to his father about it, not just a healer. It must be hard for Thranduil to see him like this. On a lighter note, your OCs are as good as always - Galelas is a jerk, Turgon bragging as always, and Annael is simply Annael. I do think though, that he'd ask Legolas what was wrong - it's not invading his privacy; it's a friend's concern. Lovely to see a new, angsty story! Jay

Bodkin · 9 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

What a great start. Poor Legolas - this kind of event is not one that can be put behind him quickly. Perhaps, a warrior who had killed oodles of orcs and other enemies would have more - terms of reference, I think I mean - and a more developed philosophy of war, but the poor elfling has gone straight from the cheerful slaughter of armies of wooden soldiers to a realisation of what death means. And death in an elleth, too - one who, in imagination at any rate, should be innocent and protected - a Miriwen or Beliniel rather than an evil spy. And where is Mithrandir when you need him? (Actually the twins could have been quite useful at this point - Legolas needs someone who has been there/done that, who isn't related to him and bleeding over his pain.) Galelas is a . . . (I am currently selecting and rejecting various descriptive terms, either for not being sufficiently internationally comprehensible or for being too rude). . . but he is! I am reminded of a quote from a favourite TV programme - along the lines of 'being Galelas is his crime . . it is also his punishment'. And he doesn't know what's been going on, but he should have enough sense to suspect that there is more to it than meets the eye - Annael says somewhere that Legolas is privileged rather than spoiled and none of his family let him get away with things like taking time off lessons just because he wants to. And Alfirin is coming to dinner! I'll bet she feels like Goldilocks about to sit down with the three bears. Or maybe Red Riding Hood with an extra helping of wolf. Legolas has been practising the eyebrow manoeuvre! (Did he use the mirror, do you think?) Poor Turgon. I wonder how much of what he has done has been in his imagination. Neglected child that he is, perhaps a lot of his boasting is bravado. And I just love Annael and his family. More screen time for Annael!! I'm writing too much. Great start. Look forward to more.

Nilmandra · 8 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

I am even more exhausted than when I read it the first time, but this time I felt what I hoped to feel - the additions are great. Thanks for humoring your, at least on this night, rather humorless beta :/

Manderly · 8 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

Yay, a new story! It looks like Legolas is going to have more than just sword training to worry about. Ah, the joys and pain of realising for the first that there is this thing called the opposite sex and that girls are more than just the object of pranks. And Turgon is so endearingly clueless. I am glad you are writing this story. I've always wondered how Legolas would deal with the trauma of killing that elf maiden, especially for one so young as him and who has yet to see a real battle. I am surprised that Thranduil has been able to keep himself from jumping in to help his baby.

French Pony · 8 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

I think you read my mind. Or you read my coach's mind. The thing with the elbow is precisely what Coach was helping me with the other day (well, that and point control, but that's a whole nother can of worms). Thelion has it almost right. The elbow thing is about speed more than raw power. It's too bad; there are all these people around Legolas who care about him, and they are all going to fail him. This story won't have its own ending; the ending is that other story, the one with two names. So you (or at least I) can see the future, and it ain't pretty. On the one hand, I can be angry at the masters for not sitting Legolas down for a discussion right now; at Ithilden, for backing off so easily; for Thranduil, for doing the same thing; for the psychiatrist-healer, for not including the rest of the family in the sessions. But on the other hand, I know how that sort of thing works. When you're traumatized, you don't want to talk about it, and you keep it inside where it festers until something stupid and dangerous happens. Something like that happened to me, once, not so very long ago. Part of me wishes that someone had stopped me sooner, and part of me knows that nothing would have made a bit of difference. I suppose that what makes me maddest is that Thranduil is a far more emotionally open parent than either of mine. He's got the emotional intelligence and the rank (he's King) to know how to deal with his hurt kid, but he just lets him go. Go see a shrink, kid, and come back when you're feeling better. Even my parents (part of what my mother once eloquently called "a family of secrets") made more of an attempt than that. Elowen ruffled his hair as she passed behind his chair on the way to take a seat at the end of the table and peel the vegetables she was carrying. “I, for one, am glad you are back safely and hope you do not intend to do anything so dangerous again until you are a few years older.” Bwoop! Bwoop! Bwoop! Red Alert, Captain! Dramatic Irony dead ahead!

LOTRFaith · 8 December 2004 · Chapter 1: Getting Better

Horray! A new story! :-) Poor Legolas... It must be horrible for him... To kill someone is trumatic in itself, but to kill one who cannot be touched by the ages passing by? I find that when I use the word immortal it gives a greater sense of higher quailty to the elves than I think is supposed to be... Immortal means you can't die.. And elves can.. :-( As we so unfortunately found out :-( But excellent start thus far! I eagerly look forward to more:-)