One Breath by M. Sebasky
TithenFeredir · 26 October 2004 · Chapter 1: One Breath
This was beautiful. Your writing is excetional and I love the way you contrast Arwen's former joy against the her grief and isolation. I think this is the best, most original treatment of her end I have yet read. Heartbreaking and lovely. TF
TithenFeredir · 26 October 2004 · Chapter 1: One Breath
This was beautiful. Your writing is excetional and I love the way you contrast Arwen's former joy against the her grief and isolation. I think this is the best, most original treatment of her end I have yet read. Heartbreaking and lovely. TF
Friend of Gondor · 16 October 2004 · Chapter 1: One Breath
this is really good. there's a lot of great stories here. what a nice juxtaposition! thanks.
Author's reply
I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for leaving a review. This author appreciates it!
Ariel · 15 October 2004 · Chapter 1: One Breath
Yes, I liked this when I read it on your LJ and it bears re-reading. The interspersed snapshots of her passion are excellent counter to the slower, melancholy of the body of the piece. Captivating and memorable. I almost wish it were longer, but it already has so much impact in this staccato presentation. Lovely - stirring - and powerful. Very nicely done.
Author's reply
Thanks, Ariel. Your insight and thoughts are valued. It was an exercise in keeping just under 1200 words. I think I went over by a few, but I wanted to keep it short and sweet. Because you know, the other one is out of control. :) Thanks again.
docmon · 14 October 2004 · Chapter 1: One Breath
oh, how heartwrending. A beautiful contrast b/w the vibrant life b/w the two of them, and the death that lingers around her alone. but what a terrifying end she comes to, to linger in this state. Terrifying, and utterly full of despair. well done. i think i need a tissue...
Author's reply
I'm glad you enjoyed it, if that's the correct word. :) Thanks for taking the time to review. I do appreciate your insights and kind words.
insignia · 14 October 2004 · Chapter 1: One Breath
Hi M. Sebasky I really enjoyed your fic. I felt realy close to Arwen, as she experiences mortality. Your words floated together seamlessly, evoking a mood of great sadness tinged with realisation of the consequences of the actions of individuals. The flashbacks were quite clear and their positioning made perfect sense to me. I thought that you portrayed a great sense of an impending doom, which Arwen expected but nonetheless (as we all say now) was a price which Arwen was quite prepared to pay. Keep up the good work! Best wishes insignia
Author's reply
Thanks, Insignia. I appreciate your kind words and the time you spent to review this. I'm very glad you enjoyed the story. Thanks for telling me so. peace. M.