Lyllyn
· 12 September 2004
· Chapter 1: One
Very nice characterization, and I like the way you translated the uncertainty of the ocean into the uncertaintly of raising a child. The lack of beta didn't leave many errors, but I spotted one sentence, "Oh, he wished it was." where the tenses didn't seem to match the sentence before.
Forgive the nitpick, the story is charming!
Author's reply
Thank you, Lyllyn! I've missed your eagle eyes and company these past few months! Nitpicks are as welcome as compliments. :)Especially as I know how dear your free time is. Grazie!
Nilmandra
· 11 September 2004
· Chapter 1: One
I was skimming through the Silmarillion today, and came across a number of passages showing where Cirdan fought with Turgon and Fingon, and where Finrod came to his aid. I had forgotten how much Cirdan had to do with the sons of Fingolfin and Finrod. Anyway, the more I think about it, I think of how hard it had to be for Fingon to send Ereinion away to the Falas, where I am sure he hoped the child would have the most chance of growing up. Cirdan may wonder why him, but I was strangely comforted today in what I read that he was a good choice. I hope he found young Ereinion a good lifelong endeavor.
Are you going to continue this - the council for more Little!Ereinion fic wants to know :)
Author's reply
Thanks, Nilmandra. I don't know, but the way life has been going I think I might be putting the quill up for other pursuits and letting you lot go on with the storytelling. *bows and grins* Thanks though!