Therefore, I Have Hope by Emily
Galimeril · 18 August 2004 · Chapter 1: The Leader of the Party
Please write more soon!!! I like this story's beginning a lot! One thing though, Youspelled Orc as orch, lose the h please. Other than that this piece is phenomenal!! keep up the good work!!! Galimeril
Author's reply
Thanks for the tip! I'm so glad you like it!
Lamiel · 18 August 2004 · Chapter 1: The Leader of the Party
Now this looks very promising. You mentioned that this is your first fanfic in the LOTR universe, in which case I say welcome, and thank you for joining us! A good writer is always welcome, and a good writer who is also a Legolas-Aragorn fan is all the more so, in my opinion. Your writing is clear and easy to read, with a nice eye for detail and perfect ear for dialogue. I was grinning all through Legolas' discussion with his companions - especially the way he was sprawled over the bed like that. Hee! And I am so looking forward to his spar with Glorfindel on the morrow. That should be something to see - though I think that I would be a little more hesitant than Legolas seems to be, were I to go up against the Balrog-slayer. The wrinkle with this match between Legolas and Arwen is an interesting side-line. I expect that this takes place just after Aragorn saw Arwen in the forest, when she had returned from Lothlorien, but he hasn't yet approached her. H'm. Poor lad - tough enough to be in love with an Elf maiden, much less the daughter of Elrond, but then to be competing against Legolas Thranduilion as well! Oh my. It's a darn good thing Legolas isn't interested in Arwen, or vice versa - though I wonder why that is. I'm glad, though. Romance stories do not interest me, and there are few ways more sure to incur the fandom's wrath than writing a Legomance, whoever the pairing is. I am eager to see how Legolas and Aragorn start interacting - they didn't talk much during the dinner. Now I wonder, why wasn't Legolas introduced properly as Thranduil's son? A minor point, but "Greenleaf Greenleaf" doesn't seem much of an introduction. Oh, but I did love them calling him "leaflet." Ha! Oh, that is wonderful! There were some minor quibbles here and there that could be polished a little - words like "input" and "nth time" seem a bit anachronistic, being as they are associated with the computer age. But on the whole this seems a well written, interesting, and extremely promising tale. I wonder if Legolas and Aragorn will spar together, after Glorfindel finishes with him? You've already proven yourself very gifted in writing quick and witty dialogue, and I'm looking forward to seeing how they interact. Thank you for this, and I am eagerly awaiting more!
Author's reply
Thanks so much for the lovely, long review! Reviews are all treasured and saved, but a long review...I'm sure you know what I mean. :) You're right about when it takes place. I practically have "The Tale of Aragorn and Arwen" memorized after reading it so much. It doesn't say how much time passed between Aragorn's meeting Arwen and his going out into the Wild, only that Elrond spoke to him before the fall of the year. I figured that gave me plenty of time. I'm not a romance person. In fact, I can safely say that I will never write romance. I like it enough when it's well done, but I don't have it in me to write it. About Legolas's introduction: I don't know really. Maybe Aragorn should have payed better attention to his lessions as a child. Who knows? It's not a main point and doesn't change the story. I might go back and change it. As for 'leaflet,' I was looking up a word in the dictionary one day and it caught my eye. I knew it was a keeper! Thanks for pointing out those words. I'll keep my eyes open for things like that.
Shaan Lien · 18 August 2004 · Chapter 1: The Leader of the Party
I hope this review doesn't go through twice, but if it does, it only stresses that I enjoyed this chapter and hope that you write more. Slightly different perspective on Legolas and Aragorn's meeting, on that I appreciate, one of them isn't in dire danger. Please continue.
Author's reply
I'm so glad you're enjoying it! I'm not sure that Aragorn likes the story so far, but he'll come around eventually. :)
Tinnuial · 18 August 2004 · Chapter 1: The Leader of the Party
What a wonderful start...I'm eagerly awaiting more...you've portrayed Legolas so well. I love how Legolas is so comfortable with his warriors and the inhabitants of Imladris alike...hope to see more of that. I'm also looking forward to Legolas and Estel getting to know each other. Thank you for sharing this with us!! :)
Author's reply
Thanks so much for reviewing! I'm afraid Legolas and Aragorn won't have much interaction at all in the next chapter, but they'll come around soon after that. =)
LOTRFaith · 17 August 2004 · Chapter 1: The Leader of the Party
Hello! I am most intrigued by this story and it certainly has my attention:-) I hope you please continue as I am eagerly looking forward to reading more:-D
Author's reply
I'm glad you like it! Part two should go up tomorrow.
Lianna · 17 August 2004 · Chapter 1: The Leader of the Party
Very interesting beginning. The idea that Legolas and Arwen would be a good couple is so blindingly obvious that there must be a good reason why it never happened. You seem to be coming up with a very convincing explanation. And I can't wait to see Legolas spar with Glorfindel. Since you asked for constructive criticism, please allow me to make one exceedingly nitpicking point: millennia (note that it has two l's and two n's) is plural. The singular is millennium.
Author's reply
Nitpicking is wonderful! I'll mark that down. Thanks so much for reviewing!
Layton Colt · 17 August 2004 · Chapter 1: The Leader of the Party
This is wonderful! I always enjoy reading different takes on how Aragorn and Legolas meet, and this seems like a very entertaining and interesting one. I hope you continue it soon. :-)
Author's reply
I hope it lives up to your expectations! Thanks for reviewing!
daw the minstrel · 17 August 2004 · Chapter 1: The Leader of the Party
I love the interaction between Legolas, Glorfindel, and the other Mirkwood warriors. Estel's interest in them is natural, I think. How embarrassing to have Elrond catch him sort of spying on them.
Author's reply
I wonder how hard it must have been for a human to grow up around Elves... he could just never win!
AM · 17 August 2004 · Chapter 1: The Leader of the Party
Chuckled a few (well, more than a few) times. Love the Elf banter. Update sooner!
Author's reply
The banter was the hardest part for me. I'm glad you like it! Thanks for the review!
calenore · 17 August 2004 · Chapter 1: The Leader of the Party
Hello! I am really enjoying what you have so far of this story... it is very well written and engaging. I especially enjoy the relationships you have built between the elves of Imladris and Legolas. Also, I like your OC Aerhos! Ha! He entertains me. Anyway, I am eagerly anticipating your next chapter! Just out of curiosity, how old is your Legolas in this story? Everyone has different ideas on how old he is!
Author's reply
Hi! Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad you like Aerhos. I was worried that he would be too typical of OC Elves. The age I'm going with is the movie-age. I tend to agree with a younger Legolas, but for this story I didn't feel that a 500-something age worked. And since Tolkien never says, I can't be wrong!