Reviews of First Meetings - Stories of Arda

Karri · 5 June 2004 · Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Well, I enjoyed it. It is a fairly uncomplicated tale, but it's nice sometimes to read something that is straightforward. I like the angst of the misunderstanding between Legolas and Elrond, and his fear that Elrond would ban him Rivendell for arriving injured, yet again. It was a nice touch. It was entertaining also that neither Legolas or Aragorn made it easy for the other to figure out who they were, yet neither would abandon the other. The twins's correct assumption that Legolas had found trouble while musing that Aragorn was even better at finding trouble, then discovering that both had found trouble was an entertaining bit as well. Overall, I think it is a fine story. :-)

Karri · 3 June 2004 · Chapter 1: Chapter 1

LOL! I have to admit I have never had anyone tell me they'd prefer I didn't read their story. Well, I can not read on if that's truly your preference and read one of your FF stories I haven't gotten to yet, instead. Would you like to make a recommendation? I've read Haunted and Darkness in the Mines thus far.

Author's reply

Wow I didn't actually think you would listen to me (most people don't). I suppose if you wanted to read on you could, but I don't really like the story. I keep meaning to change it but I never get around to writng anymore. In fact I have a whole inbox full of your challenges that I keep saving and mean to write but never do. One of these days I'm just going to come out with a whole bunch of stories. Anyway, I don't really have any reccomendations because I hate most of my stories, but if you are going to read them then I caution you that my older ones haven't been beta'ed and so are full of mistakes and a lack of description. But thanks for reading anyway =)

Karri · 31 May 2004 · Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh! Ending the chapter on a mysterious note -- nice touch! This stories looks to be very entertaining. I lookd forward to reading the rest. :-)

Author's reply

Oh, I kind of wish you weren't reading this. I don't mean any offense by that, it's just that I love your work and respect your writing very highly and to have to reading something of mine that I hate kind of depresses me. I keep meaning to either delete or redo this story because of the ending and lack of plot twists, but I have no inspiration to write at the moment. I hope your opinion of my writing won't diminish after reading this story and if I do ever come out with more stories I hope you will read them (can you tell I have no confidence in my own writing??? lol). Anyway, thanks for the review =)

EllyBaggins · 27 February 2004 · Chapter 6: Chapter 6

brilliant, brilliant story! Little leaf! lol! let's just say that legolas is best friends with aragorn AND gimli. then it's fair. (although as a viggo mortensen fan, i think aragorn should be his best best best friend) but enough about that. it was a great fan fiction and i would love to read more like these- well done!

silent lurker · 18 February 2004 · Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Silent Lurker checking in I enjoyed reading this story and can't wait for something new. The onlything that bugs me a little about the last chapter is that I feel that the Elrond/Legolas "clearing of the air" was a little emotionally shortchanged. But I enjoyed it Good work

tmelange · 18 February 2004 · Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Congratulations on finishing this. It is a very nice story.

Any · 18 February 2004 · Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Very nice story! I'm looking forward to any sequel you might think of! And I'd love to know what prank the twins will play on poor old Glorfy! ;) Hehe... Thanks for sharing this story! :) ~Any

Araphin · 17 February 2004 · Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Don't stop!!! Please!!! Update really really soon!!!

Author's reply

Thanks for the review =)

Lera · 16 February 2004 · Chapter 5: Chapter 5

I don't know if you tried to make a change on purpose or not, but you did. These last two chapters flowed so much better. You talent at describing the feelings of the moment, was not detracted from by stiff dialogue. Why? Because there wasn't any stiff dialogue! I'll happily look forward to more. While, I'm never too concerned by Leggy cliffhangers,(because after all, he has to survive) I love reading about how he and Aragorn met. Elledan and Elrohir's convo about hoping Legolas and Aragorn would never meet, was quite amusing, and worded in a way that it didn't sound trite. Good job. I have one question though: The rider who was sent ahead of Legolas to tell Elrond he was on his way; what happened to him? Shouldn't he have met Leggy on his way back? Maybe he's still at Imladris? Ciao.

Author's reply

I actually didn't try to change anything, it just smoothed itself out on its own. Hmm, since I forgot about him, I guess the rider who was sent ahead of Legolas is resting at Imladris.

tmelange · 16 February 2004 · Chapter 5: Chapter 5

How exciting! Great continuation. I'm glad the guys made it back to Rivendell...

Author's reply

Thanks for the review =)

Templa Otmena · 14 February 2004 · Chapter 4: Chapter 4

The fic is coming along really well and it is a refrreshing take on the way in which Aragron and Legolas first met. Evil cliffie though... UPDATE SOON!

Author's reply

Now I don't think that cliffie was too bad, I mean, there are pleanty more authors that create worse cliffie's and then make you wait longer than I do...lol. Thanks for reviewing =)

tmelange · 14 February 2004 · Chapter 4: Chapter 4

How exciting! And what's wrong with Legolas...? More soon, please.

Author's reply

Glad you like the sotry. We find out what's wrong with Legolas next chapter =)

tmelange · 13 February 2004 · Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I think I'm following this story on ff.net but just thought I'd leave a review here too to encourage you to keep writing. Great story so far. Kudos.

Author's reply

Thanks, I needed the encouragement, I was almost considering not posting here anymore.

Lera · 12 February 2004 · Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Okay, I read all the way to the last chapter posted so something apparently caught my interest. You write really good settings and you're good at describing things. But the dialogue was really stiff and unnatural. It sounded like they were reading from a really bad script. If you just made the dialogue sound more natural, I'd continue to read the story. Somehow you've surrounded the characters with really believeable settings so I'd like to see this get better. I think you're actually using too proper of English. When we first met Aragorn, however, it was completely opposite. He sounded like a modern day teenager. Somehow I don't think they used "great" that way, nor did they call their horses stupid. So that totally threw me off, and then suddenly it switched back to the other extreme of too perfect, stiff English. Almost like it switched authors. I hope you can take this to heart, because there were totally some lines in there that gave reason for hope. For example: "You said three!" "I lied. This way you were more relaxed, whereas if I had waited for three you would have tensed up." That was funny, and I could see Aragorn doing it. Although a contraction between would and have, might've been nice. I know some are against Middle Earth inhabitants using contractions, but sometimes without them, sentances are just too long and wordy. Ok, one more thing, and I'll leave you alone. I'm shocked and apalled that Legolas was journeying to Rivendell alone. That's a dangerous journey especially through the Misty Mountains where orcs are always on the prowell. I thought that was what his father and brothers wanted to give him a break from! Sorry, but that just wasn't real believeable. Ciao, I'll read more if you write it and review more if you want.

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