Chigger
· 22 December 2003
· Chapter 9: The Battle of Five Armies
Sorry I wasn't *gasp* here earilier *whoo*, but I've been so behind in my reading, that when I finally got to read all the *gasp* chapters that have been filling my *whoo* inbox with notifications and answering the reviews, *gasp* I've gotten *whoo*, that I accidentally missed this one and had to run back over *gasp* here to read it. *whoo* ;)
And there's another breakthrough on the field! Brandybuck threw a wild ball, but Took managed to connect and sent it FLYING into the stands! And the crowd is on its feet as coach Baggins congratualtes the young batter after a hard earned homerun. ;)
(I'm really not into sports and I know absolutely nothing about them, but for some reason, I just had to do that. :) )
Author's reply
I love baseball! Nice play-by-play for a non-sports fan.
The Egg
· 22 December 2003
· Chapter 9: The Battle of Five Armies
*Claps hands happily* Oh I'm so happy! He's starting to remember! ^_^ It’s a mundane little thing but it’s always those sort of things that stay with people.
I've lurked around your stories for the past month and must say, you are quickly becoming my favorite hobbit-author. (Pippin! ^_^) *Giggles* I have the cutest image of Pippin hiding soldiers in his boat to take home. Please update some more! (And you are a steady updater to! *Thumbs up* Very much liking that.)
Author's reply
Thank you so much for your kind words. I am glad you are enjoying this one. I will be updating again at least by the weekend. Would have been sooner, but too much to do for Christmas. Have a happy holiday and keep reviewing. Lets me know if I am still headed in the right direction. I tend to wonder off if not watched closely.
Iorhael
· 22 December 2003
· Chapter 5: It's Cold
Oh, I can almost hear Pippin's small, terrified, confused voice. Poor little pumpkin. And Frodo is just so wise. Very touching.
Iawen Londea
· 21 December 2003
· Chapter 9: The Battle of Five Armies
MORE PROGRESS!!! YAY! I'm so happy Pippin remembered something although it nearly completely destroyed him trusting Merry at all. I wonder how much longer it will take for him to remember something else.
*whaps Paladin*
Author's reply
Not sure about how long it will take as all of this is guess work. I have a general idea about what will happen but it's very open-ended. Let me know if you think it has gone off track at any point.
Mysterious Jedi
· 21 December 2003
· Chapter 9: The Battle of Five Armies
Cute. In case you didn't know, biscuits are called scones in England. :)
Author's reply
That one I did know as I worked in a cafe for a while and we sold scones. The cookie thing had me totally confused though, I couldn't imagine a country without cookies! What would you do with all of the milk? Seriously, I think changing the title to Biscuits was a good idea.
Yum! Yum! Yummy! COOKIES!!! :)
It's amazing how you can slave all day over a hot stove (not really but it sounds more dramatic that way) and work your fingers to the bone making several dozen cookies, and then, within one sitting, every darn last one of them is gone. Completely gone. Crumbs picked up and eaten, the bowl and mixers licked clean and not a cookie to be found. It's one of the great mysteries of life that will never be answered. "Where have all the cookies gone?" :)
Another great chapter and I hope Pippin wakes up a little more in the next chapter. ;)
Author's reply
Sounds like you just want some cookies, Chigger. LOL As to Pippin coming to a bit more, well, you know how I stretch these things out, so we may be in for a long haul. Hang in there, have some cookies, and come back later.
On another note, thanks for my word of the day. I shall remember this one lest I make the same mistake again.
I was wondering how you would handle Pippin and the absence of his parents. You did a great job with it! =D I feel awful for the poor lad. *whacks Paladin* I am going to whack that fool of a Took until he gets his act together, lol.
Pippin seems to be trusting whatever Sam says. I like that. It's very interesting. Great job, mellon nin, as usual.
Author's reply
Glad you liked this bit about Pippin's parents. I just seem to keep making them totally worthless! I have to work on that in the future, but for now in this fiction at least, I think I'm stuck with it.
I think if you didn't know any of them, Sam would be the first one that you would trust. He just has an honest face and manner about him. Also, I never feel he gets enough credit for his common sense.
Lovely chapter, very visual. I could just see what was happening! I love it when that happens.
One tiny suggestion? "Cookies" is a very American word, at least that's what I'm told. These are called "sweet biscuits" or just "biscuits" in England. I'm not sure what they call biscuits!
Author's reply
Thank you! So much of the time, I feel that I am too heavy on the dialogue. Glad this one came off well.
You may want to read the new and improved "Cookies" as it is now, thanks to your help, "Biscuits"! I really appreciate the assistance on this one. Just hope I got all of the cookies out and the biscuits in.
Chigger
· 19 December 2003
· Chapter 7: The Old Hobbit From Bree
Merry, Merry, Merry. Why, oh, why couldn't you have taught him something more along the lines of a little kids' song? You know, like Little Boe Peep? :) Still, perhaps that wouldn't have cleared the room half so well. ;)
Another great chapter! And keep up the hard work!
Author's reply
Now, you know Merry! Always up to something interesting. In a way that was my nod to what I have always seen as Bilbo's unconventional style. Most adults would have been outraged by Pippin's little song, but Bilbo found a way to make the entire thing work for him. Mad Baggins strikes again! Keep reading, Chigger. Maybe Merry will surprise us and straighten up at some point.
Oh on another note. I can't wait for the story with Belecthor and his girl. Glad something I said is bringing on another story with these lovely characters in it. It really does pay to review the stories that you enjoy.
websterans
· 19 December 2003
· Chapter 7: The Old Hobbit From Bree
Nice. I like it that you let Frodo be strong rather than making him limp as too many fanficers do. It is angsty without being melodramatic, and I do hope you continue
Author's reply
Thank you! I think of Frodo as being very strong-willed and able to work through things a bit better than others might just based on what he goes through in Lord Of The Rings. As they point out in the book, he endures more than most could and accomplishes what no one else can. I am glad someone agrees with me.
Chigger
· 16 December 2003
· Chapter 6: Story Time
Good, good. This is good. I hope things look up even higher in the next chapter. But then, if this story is going to be as long as The Road Less Travelled, we still have a way to go, don't we. :)
Author's reply
LOL I hope it doesn't go that long! I just couldn't get that one to stop. Let's hope I can find a quicker ending to this one or we shall all die of boredom.
Chigger
· 16 December 2003
· Chapter 5: It's Cold
Progress! Even if just a little. I hope he calms down soon, or poor Frodo won't be up to the big ordeal ahead of him in a few years. We don't want that!
Author's reply
I am afraid that I have given a great deal of the work on this one to poor Frodo, but for some reason, I see a great many fictions where Frodo is the weak one. I always see him has having such a great inner strength because he has to go through so very much in his life.
Iorhael
· 15 December 2003
· Chapter 3: Awake
Terrible! Pippin lost his memories?
Sorry, just got to continue this time. Expect more from me. :)
Author's reply
Will be looking forward to it! Let me know what you think.
Iawen Londea
· 15 December 2003
· Chapter 6: Story Time
PROGRESS!! WAHOO!!! Good thinking Sam, and LMAO at Merry and Sam asking Frodo what he's doing. "I'm reading this book, what do you think I'm doing?" ROFL.
*slaps Paladin* How can you care so little for your OWN SON! Fool of a Took.
Wonderful chappie mellon nin. =D
Author's reply
Many thanks for the words of encouragement. Glad you got a laugh out of Frodo's read-aloud session. Thought it was time for a bit of humor.
Elwen
· 15 December 2003
· Chapter 6: Story Time
As the oldest of the hobbits, its good to see Frodo coming up with all the ideas for helping Pip. Although he must be exhausted with all that fire building and I'm glad he has that tea, because he's going to get an awfully sore throat with all that reading aloud. ;)
I'm continuing to enjoy this story very much.
Author's reply
I am glad that you are still reading and enjoying. Let me know if it goes astray. I need all of the help I can get! Thanks.
Chigger
· 13 December 2003
· Chapter 4: New Beginning
Look out, Frodo! Who knows what that kid might be doing in there, albiet without a memory.
You're going to update again soon, right?
Author's reply
Yes I plan to do that if the holidays don't keep me running! I am also taking your advice and leaving the pop off for now. Think I may have over-reacted on that a bit.
Chigger
· 13 December 2003
· Chapter 3: Awake
Poor, Pippin. I hope he gets better soon. At least insofar as to stop vomiting. That's no fun; no fun at all.
Author's reply
I know. That was one of the things that I felt some people might not want to read. I, sometimes have a weak stomach and things like what I was writing will sometimes make me a bit ill. LOL Also, it is a depressing chapter.
Elwen
· 12 December 2003
· Chapter 4: New Beginning
Poor hobbits. I feel sorry for absolutely everyone here. I don't know who I want to comfort first!
Great storytelling. I'm looking forward to more.
Iawen Londea
· 12 December 2003
· Chapter 4: New Beginning
Excellent chapter. Poor Pip. I think you're writing this very well, again I hope you continue soon.
Iawen Londea
· 10 December 2003
· Chapter 3: Awake
Oh, poor Pippin!! *huggles the poor hobbit* I feel really badly for him, and for Frodo and Merry. *huggles Merry* What a situation you have created. I can't wait to see more.
Author's reply
Thank you. Stick around and see if I can write myself out of this one in fewer chapters than I was able to in my last long fiction. LOL So far, the little Yule story is the only one I seem to be able to keep short!
Pearl Took
· 10 December 2003
· Chapter 3: Awake
Well Done! This is definately an angst filled story! Right now, I'm not sure I feel more sorry for, Pippin or Merry! I see you are amoung those who have chosen an unloving Paladin, those of us who haven't seem to be in the minority. LOL
Author's reply
I find that my impression of Paladin started to develope from reading the fan fics that you are thinking about. I had never given much thought to him or how he was as a father before I started visiting the sites and reading the stories. I use it mainly because it serves to keep Pippin with Frodo and Merry and makes my story less complex to write in terms of characters. Also the hobbits really do lead a charmed life in the Shire so it adds a bit of drama. Glad you are enjoying the story.
Elwen
· 10 December 2003
· Chapter 3: Awake
A very well written tale that carries me along. I'm not a fan of Pippin centric fic but I shall be watching out for updates on this one. Pippin's agitation on waking is heartbreaking. And I love your outwardly calm Frodo.
Author's reply
Thank you so much for the kind words. I am glad that I managed to convey Pippin's state properly. I was a bit worried about that part. I always think of Frodo as the voice of reason among the hobbits and the one that gives the most thought to his actions.
Iorhael
· 9 December 2003
· Chapter 2: Waiting
Yikes! What kind of a father Paladin is! How could he do that to his own son? The least he could have done was get over to Pippin without telling anyone where he was going!
Never thought of Pippin this way. Great job!
Author's reply
I wanted Pippin at Bag End with Frodo and Sam and Merry and so I decided to use this plot device. May be just a bit too much? In my other story I indicated that Paladin was not a very good father and so I continued on that line here. Suggestions are welcome. Let me know if this seems like a bad way to go with things. I have a plan but I am open to suggestions. Thanks for reading.
Chigger
· 9 December 2003
· Chapter 2: Waiting
Sam's like me in this instance. I don't understand why my brother and father spoil the three year old! Why? Why? Why? Don't they know, like Sam seems to, that when they're that young they need to be corrected when they're wrong, not taught to do it again?! AGH!!
Anyway, sorry I haven't been around to review earlier, but things have been hectic. :) Keep up the good work, and I will be back to read more.
Author's reply
Spoken like someone who knows a bit about small children. Are you telling me you don't do any of the spoiling? He must be able to get to you as well. LOLHope the hectic part means that you are writing more stories. Keep reading because at some point on this one I know I will need advice.