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| More Dangerous and Less Wise by daw the minstrel | 29 Review(s) |
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| sofia | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/14/2008 |
| I was so happy to see that you started another story! This one looks to be a good one since you have Legolas and Maltanaur together, injured, and Eilian and Beliond together. I can't wait to see how each group behaves and what the story is! Author Reply: Thanks, Sofia. I've toyed with the idea of switching keepers for a while now, and this seemed like a good opportunity. And then the story from Thranduil's youth just seemed too good to pass up. We'll see how it goes! | |
| White Wolf | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/14/2008 |
| I was thrilled when I saw your name on a new story. I knew that having Legolas, Eilian and their keepers together was going to be a treat, and as usual, you didn't disappoint. Despite the injuries, I loved the inherent humor in the unfolding situation. Eilian falling out of a tree! Who'd have thought such a thing. And he wasn't even one of the ones that got hurt. I'm as anxious as Legolas for Maltanaur to 'spill the beans'. Author Reply: Thank you, White Wolf. This will be mostly light-hearted because I need some laughs right now. It's sad how easily I can amuse myself! :-) I'm working on the story about Thranduil and the keepers right this very minute. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/14/2008 |
| Delicious - I started smiling right at the beginning and couldn't suppress my glee all the way through. So typically Eilian to come off without a scratch. So typically Beliond to treat Legolas like a particularly dim-witted elfling. And the idea of Maltanaur telling tales out of school ... Of course the story is more about him and Beliond! Barely about Thranduil at all! Sophistry, Maltanaur! So lovely to see this foursome in the woods together - and multi-chaptered, too. Oh, joy. Author Reply: Sophistry, Maltanaur! LOL. Lately I've decided to use my motherly training to judge what people say, including politicians. If my kid had given me the line that someone else is spouting, would I have believed it? I see you have the same sort of insight! Thanks for the review, Bodkin. I hope all is well with you. | |
| Freelancer of Arda (Estel Greenleaf) | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/14/2008 |
| Yay! another story from my favorite author! Author Reply: LOL. Thank you, Estel. I hope you like the story. | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/14/2008 |
| It's wonderful to see Legolas, Eilian and their minders again! I really like the way you draw the differences between the two bodyguards - especially as Eilian is always the more reckless. There are some great descriptions and imagery throughout, starting with the very first paragraph: 'the branch sagged into a heart-stopping imitation of an otter slide'. I like that - I can picture the moment so clearly! I love the way you build on the tension - first Legolas nearly falls but doesn't, then Eilan falls but is unharmed, then Legolas and Maltanaur are both injured when the ledge collapses. What more could go wrong? (On second thoughts, don't tell me - I might not like it.) The best line: '"I am a Wood-Elf," Eilian said, which would have been more reassuring if he had not just fallen out of a tree.' LOL! Finally, like Legolas, I can't wait to hear what Thranduil did! Jay Author Reply: Thank you, Jay. I found it hard to manage four speaking characters on stage at once, even though readers are likely to know them. I can't imagine what a new reader would make of it (assuming there are still new readers in LOTR fanfic). As you know, I've been working on description, so I'm glad you think it worked. What more could go wrong? (On second thoughts, don't tell me - I might not like it.) "Ha!" says poor Elrohir. "You love it when things go wrong!" | |
| mistry89 | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/13/2008 |
| How typical - Eilian gets off scot free and is off to have an adventure (without his own bodyguard)! Looking forward to hearing the story about Thranduil, too :) Thank you. Author Reply: It amused me to have Eilian get off without a scratch. LOL. Beliond wasn't amused though. We'll see how they all do. Thanks for the review, Mistry. | |
| meckinock | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/13/2008 |
| I didn't put Beliond and Eilian together to have them settle down and study history. Now you're getting me all excited. Author Reply: LOL. The adventure is probably smaller than it should be even yet. I keep writing in big letters in the margins of my notes: Don't waste this chance! | |
| meckinock | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/13/2008 |
| Poor Beliond. Yes, I think it is best if they all stay put for a while and listen to a bedtime story! It is great to see the boys all together again! Author Reply: Bedtime story coming up! But some adventure too. I didn't put Beliond and Eilian together to have them settle down and study history. | |
| pipinheart | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/13/2008 |
| Lovely... Eilian would fall from that branch and it is Legolas and maltanaur who are injured. It is quit funny to see Beliond and Eilain pairing up, but Eilain has a way with words. And the story maltanaur is getting ready to tell Legolas... I have always been curious of Thraunduil and his friends youth... A slip of the tounge indeed.... Can't wait for more.. Author Reply: Wouldn't you know that Eilian would get off without a scratch while Legolas and Maltanaur are both hurt? LOL Beliond and Maltanaur know all the secrets Thranduil would rather not be told. So telling will be fun! Thanks, Pipinheart. | |
| Noor | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/13/2008 |
| Thank you thank you! A Daw story after such a long time and the first chapter promises much. You have set the scene so well.I can't wait! Noor Author Reply: You're welcome you're welcome! I hope the story lives up to the scene-setting. As I look at what I planned, I'm a little worried I'll waste the chance I've given myself to show Beliond guarding Eilian because my outline seems to concentrate on the Thranduil part. Oh well. Thanks for the review, Noor. | |