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The Green Knight  by Le Rouret 7 Review(s)
LynReviewed Chapter: 13 on 6/5/2006
Two things---the humorous banter among Gimli, Bandobras, and Legolas is
the best!

Earlier you added that Legolas had yelled--in dwarvish---at the unworthy dwarves who had mistreated Bandobras. I believe Tolkien stressed that the dwarves kept
their language secret. While it is not known whether Gimli would have taught
dwarvish to Legolas, I tend to think he did not for two reasons: 1) it was
not absolutely necessary for survival of either and 2) in honor of his father
and his race's tradition of secrecy. I have no doubt, though, that an
infuriated Legolas would have made quite a dent in the renegade dwarves'
heads simply by the strength of his voice no matter what language he used!

Orophins DottirReviewed Chapter: 13 on 12/20/2003
Gracious, how did I get so behind on your story? Must be the holiday season here in my world.

Whatever you intended and however interesting your expertise is on tournaments, I fear that you must accept that Bandy is your best creation. I do not love hobbits. They annoy me greatly. This one, I make an exception.
I also love your depiction of Gimli. What a dwarf!

“T’ch, t’ch!” clucked Gimli into his beard, trying not to smile. “There now, Bandy, I promise I won't complain about your cooking at all when Legolas is dead, but should he live I reserve the right to make my opinions known."

I also loved the bit where Legolas can't convince Bandy he is alright and just goes with elven magic as an explanation. Elven magic can be so handy.

Well done!

Humble Scribe to his Majesty Thranduil

LamielReviewed Chapter: 13 on 11/25/2003
I like the change in perspective here, showing it from the opponent's viewpoint. Very effective. And if ever a knight deserved to go down, that one did. Imagine a man of Rohan using a horse like that! Terrible.

I worry that the bit with Bandobras might have been too much--Hobbits aren't THAT fawning, even when they are underage. But I loved Gimli's line, "I promise I won't complain about your cooking when Legolas is dead." Hee hee! Wonderful!

Lovely chapter, action packed and exciting, and I particularly liked the build to the storm. "Lightening flashed again, kindling the bat-wings . . ." Very nice. Also liked the way Brytta was unaware that he had fallen. That's very true to my experience with injuries like that.

Well done. Thank you.

CorielReviewed Chapter: 13 on 11/24/2003
Well I'm glad to see Legolas up and about again with hardly a crimp in his schedule. I was worried about him for a week there. And Brytta deserved as good as he got, if not more. Sheesh, you would think a man from ROHAN of all places would know how to treat a horse. Truly shameful of him. Kudos to Legolas for knocking him over the head.
Inbox wide open for the next chapter alert!

And to answer a previous question, I don't think you've exactly made this a cake-walk for Legolas, but even if he ekes out a hard-won victory, you know there will be some malcontent out there who will cry foul simply because he's not, well, *human*, and is thus at an unfair advantage. Is that grounds for disqualification? I can already hear the crowd . . .

TinnuialReviewed Chapter: 13 on 11/24/2003
Three Cheers for the Green Knight!! :)
Riveting chapter, marvellous as usual!! Just what I needed on a dreary Monday...
Poor Bandobras...he really is the most endearing little thing. I wonder how Legolas felt, being compared to a cow....I've been giggling for a bit regarding that one...
Thanks for posting!!

ElenoraReviewed Chapter: 13 on 11/24/2003
I just recently stumbled onto this site and happened upon your story...rivetting!! I was thoroughly hooked and when I came to the end of chapter 13, was dismayed that I couldn't read more. This whole story has a definitely different feel to it than your average LotR fanfic story. I felt like I was right in the midst of "Ivanhoe," which is not a bad thing, since I love "Ivanhoe"! The whole sense of "middle ages" is very pronounced and your use of language and description to bring this out is very well done. I can't yet see quite where you're going with this story...I always have a tendency to see more in a story than is there, so naturally I'm suspect of the little hobbit already...I keep thinking, "Okay, who is this little guy?? He's probably not a hobbit at all!!" And I'm probably way out in left field (or even out past the fence) with that speculation. Regardless, you have hooked another Legolas/LotR fanfic reader and I'll be anxiously awaiting the next chapter.

Elenora

fliewatuetReviewed Chapter: 13 on 11/24/2003
Wow, the atmosphere in this chapter was so tangible. The impending thunderstorm enhancing the tension of the joust was a nice twist and so well described that I could almost hear the thunder ... And the sound of the raindrops on the armour was a nice remainder of the battle of Helm's Deep scene in the movie.

Poor Bandy must have had quite some shock at seeing his beloved master injured (as did I), but I am glad that it was truly just a scratch.

But my favourite part in this chapter was the description of Brytta's defeat, which he did deserve, IMO, just for the way he treated his horse! Telling this scene from Brytta's POV worked really well, especially for conveying his confusion at what had actually happened when he found himself upon the ground (missing his poor horse *grin*).

Now I wonder what Legolas and Hellas of Lossarnach have to discuss.

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